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To clarify first I am currently working with the author as a proofreader, but I tried to keep the review as neutral as possible and without bias, if this is not a problem for you keep reading! Solid, intriguing and kind of relatable. The world the author proposes is as interesting as the people living on it, the presented character until now are all very well written and developed and so is the protagonist Seraphina, I personally find her really likeable and wholesome but making the point that she is very particular personality wise and I think this depth suits her really well taking into notice the context surrounding her. The world building as far as the story has gone is really solid and creates a background for the events happening on the story and it feels like it was an alive world with their own traditions such as the Harvest moon festival as the primary example, taking an entire chapter to contextualize it a little bit. In general I think is a really promising fantasy take on a formula that blew up with the Isekai era, definitely worth a read.

Y al parecer, tú alguien con la capacidad de atención de una mosca de la fruta. Deja de tocar las bolas y habla algo mínimamente constructivo cuando tengas los sentidos para leer más de tres capítulos y quejarte de un personaje que ni conoces.

Ah yes, a fine reference for a fine gentleman

SPOILER ---------- Jack's intervention at the end was kind of anticlimactic but I think that was the point Still not a Warhammer fic so 3/10

In general my favourite written fan fiction work so far. The story is really solid and has a lot of background. As someone that is relatively new to the fan fiction formula instead of a regular OS I feel refreshed reading in general about Jack's story on this Wonderful World. The narrative and general vocabulary the author is using may be kind complex but it never gets boring or uninteresting and it keeps you on your toes so you don't miss anything. If this is something to remark I would like to also address the little notes the author left at the end of every chapter also helps to get the reader's attention with a more personal touch with some funny references even. The characters are well written and its noticeable by the author's fidelity to the original Konosuba's cast but with a little funny and honestly really interesting twist to them in their personality. This is not about the story but it's really nice of the author to keep a regular update basis for the story because that shows he actually cares about what is he/she writing. Still not a Warhammer fanfic so 3/10