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i take that back, bro you literlly killed usopp, ohh man not gonna lie, that was kinda a mood kill, i get that this story is about him, but dude, and whyd you make him start in the proximity where luffy and his crew get together, i mean i woudnt have cared if you just left them alone but dude.[img=faceslap]
- ricardo_yammouni17dCommentéCh 57 I'm Alive!!!
- ricardo_yammouni1mthCommentéCh 225 Chapter 225: Person with Flaw (1)
- ricardo_yammouni1mthCommentéCh 225 Chapter 225: Person with Flaw (1)
- ricardo_yammouni2mthCommentéCh 5 Chapter 5: Fairy Tail Finally Knows
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Of course he has to be 3, I know you're a pred. You love to molest children. I hate you
Using his magic, he starts to control his toothbrush, using half of his focus to brush his own teeth while his other focus was on the door to immediately stop when someone entered. Thankfully, he was the only 3-year-old in the orphanage, and the older members of the orphanage always wake up way after he finishes his routine. - ricardo_yammouni2mthCommenté
AYO!!!!
"Harder, old man!" Satoru sneered, throwing the other party backwards like a bowling ball. - ricardo_yammouni2mthCommentéCh 2 Blood feud
- ricardo_yammouni3mthCommentéCh 10 10. Shaw's Media
- ricardo_yammouni4mthCommenté
Your story was terribly written here, you can't use the same idea and change it only a paragraph after. You stated their job is in the next 3 months but earlier you said 6? I don't understand how you let this slip through while edits were made. I'm disappointed in your work, it isn't an enjoyable read. أيها الحقير السخيف أصلح كتابتك أيها الشاذ اللعين - Ricky Y
One of them was visibly old and had wrinkles coupled with some scares on his face, showing he'd been an Auror for a long time. His hair was mostly grey now, but it used to be black. His eyes, even if weary, held a sharp look of wisdom and experience, and he moved with confidence, like someone who'd seen it all. The young Auror, on the other hand, was full of energy. He wore a neat, brightly coloured robe and had messy dark hair. He seemed eager, determined — and a bit scared — but that was understandable seeing the nature of their job for the next three months. While the old Auror had the air of someone who'd been through a lot, the young one had the attitude of someone just beginning their career. - ricardo_yammouni4mthCommentéCh 27 Chapter 27
- ricardo_yammouni4mthCommentéCh 24 Chapter 24