TheAuthorKami

Different points of view are great, but the technique is poorly used. Repeating the same chapter with the same dialogues, only from a different perspective, can become tiring and annoying over time. No matter how much I love seeing the characters I adore from different perspectives, author, I strongly recommend that you try using a third-person narrator or a third-person limited narrator. With a little maneuvering, I’m sure you can combine different perspectives in the same chapter without it sounding repetitive.

Is there romance or harem in this story? Personally, I don’t like it, but I noticed that many of your stories include harem or romance, so I wanted to ask since it’s not listed in the tags.

Huh? Did he accept it so easily? Or did he see something in he?

A hellish start, but chances are the seal might work initially, but the Bijū's chakra will eventually overcome it.

Wouldn’t it have been better if the information about his past had been revealed little by little? This prologue feels like an overly long info dump.

No. It’s true that Peter guides him to what he believes is the “right” path, but the problem lies in how he guides him. He does it in such a superficial way that it’s frustrating. The whole Asian-style loyalty to family? Bah! Even a blind person can see the guy just doesn’t want the kid to kill him.

So… the sergeant has been watching him for a long time watching him… disassemble weapons? Because he clearly wasn’t shooting or killing enemies. The plot armor is potent.

I have mixed feelings about this story. On one hand, the concept is interesting; on the other, I feel that the author didn’t know how to make the most of it. When you read the synopsis, you expect a sweet and strange relationship between a father and his children. But what do you get instead? A supposed father who, on more than one occasion, has shown that he sees his son more as an object than as his child. It’s more than clear that Azu had mental health issues stemming from genetics (perhaps side effects of his powers), issues that the protagonist worsened by giving him a shallow upbringing with superficial advice, solely focused on the idea that he must take care of his family. In other words, the main character hopes that, in the future, Azu doesn’t become a villain and kill him. The protagonist knows his son has SERIOUS mental health issues, so what does he do about it? NOTHING. He says something superficial like “we need to correct him,” and by the next morning, he’s forgotten all about it. He’s a terrible father.

This protagonist… he's not very smart, is he? A man with a gun in his hand and a wounded child. You don't need to add 2+2 to know that if you make him angry, you're lost. Besides, why didn't he tell her that he had seen her or, on the contrary, that he hadn't seen her? He barely knows her and he's already sacrificing himself for her...