AFO: "Ahh...my Exorcist Quick that I haven't used it since the Heian era."

I like that it slows down the pace a little so you can think properly about what you want. At this rate it seemed like he would run out of things to do after becoming strong enough.

Oh Ouuuu is it time to see Domain Expansion in action?

Let's see how this progresses. Basically I'm not a fan of the protagonist because it seems to me that everyone who thinks Sakura is useless hasn't seen the anime. However, as long as the "Sakura hater" thing is not recurring then it will be fine. So far it seems that she is perfectly justified in her worries to me, sacrificing a few years of childhood doesn't matter if it guarantees your future security. Nice chapter.

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I'm sure Naruto wasn't one to two years old in that scene, so you screwed something up with the timeline.

And that's all a normal, boring and flat character...or is it? After all, it wouldn't be normal not to have more depth than that, wouldn't it?

Image of her in her real form. Megumi Kato was my inspiration for the concept and she has the same look.

Ps. I just remembered that 54 was caught precisely because he is a pervert, so my theory fell apart. 🤣🤣

En este punto me la suda Leviathan solo quiero ver más escenas de amor entre Naruto y Hinata. Son tan lindos que me dan diabetes.

Congratulations it's your first hater.

I found this fanfic on Scribblehub, but since it doesn't have a notification system I decided to follow it from here. Good luck with this fanfic, I'll be following it.

Yeah this was reaaaally bad. Like she has 2 years being worried about this day and she magically forgot about it the day before.

In general I like this fanfic. It's nice to read. I like that the crossovers with JJK are Slice of Life. That gives you the opportunity to throw in the funniest characters from as many worlds as you want without making a mess of the supernatural world or the power systems. The writing is very good in my inexperienced opinion, I have no problems with the flow and the dialogues. I don't have anything good to say about the characters or the world because I don't know where the franchises come from except for JJK. All the good things said now my complaints. The protagonist is nice, but I don't know if it's too early for me to say this, but I think she lacks personality. It's not bad, just a little bland. I think she could use some good/bad habits to give her more spark. Smoking, eating a lot, poor orientation, OCD, any nonsense you can think of would make her more memorable. In writing I think it would be better if you avoided putting your exposition comments in between, it takes it out of the immersion a bit.Speaking of taking out of the immersion... Honestly, everything about the ROB could very well be removed and everything would be better. Honestly it just complicates things and expands the universe more than necessary and it makes everything feel...useless. Finally...the system. I have no problem with there being a system, just with it being so unnecessarily informative. Having said all that...I hope my rant doesn't down you or anything, I'm just writing the things I didn't like and I'll take the opportunity to leave a review. Do what you want and I will continue reading because in general I like this fanfic.

She could always create three or four muskets a day already reloaded in her inventory and in case of a fight do like Mami. it would also give her levels, she just has to be careful to never have less than half of energy just in case.

The second one. I understand that many habits don't go away even when someone its's no longer in the same circumstances, so I found it relatably funny.

The funniest thing about the scene is that she is rich so the offer of eggs should matter little to her.

Oh yeah, go lie to one of the most intelligent beings in the world, it sure works. I don't understand her need to do something in such a hurry. Toga's parents were bad, but they never physically abused her or denied her basic needs. Why throw away a perfectly settled life for a plan to avenge a girl (Toga) that she doesn't know?

It is usually difficult to mentally control a Kryptonian without using magic because their brains work too fast. However since she is not a real Kryptonian I would say that if you want to keep this realistic she has no real way to escape the brainwashing. Apparently Gingantomachia was able to escape the brainwashing, but that's probably because he's really stupid.So either you make her not fall into it or you make her lose against Shinsou which would be quite original and you save yourself having to write a way for Charlotte not to win each and every fight in three seconds.

Boring I guess.