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I like the story the premise is great but the first few chapters need to be reread for grammar errors and there are times where a better use of word choice is best. Character’s are suddenly introduced and there are quite a few in the first few chapters. Interacts are great and fights are descriptive. But I can’t really visualize them well enough. The world had many things I want to know and would wish they were described in more detail. Possibly describe the village, city, buildings, ground, and air.
U have a lot of characters but no much backstory on them. If u plan to reveal them in the future sure But the world building needs more than just a premise. Build your individuals more.
Love the dynamic of romance here. Geko was sudden and wished there was more description on how the change from weapon to human and vive versa can be described
A few wording issues but I so far like your description of the characters. Brutal fight and language. Just wish I knew more about the back story of so many other people in this chapter.
sup so I just revamped my series so it lost your review. could you take a look at my series again. I have made some changes again. Hope you enjoy and let me know if you need my opinion any anything. Peace and GN
BTW had to revamp the series? If possible please give me a review on the new Traveling Through Tales. Hope you like the grammar edits and restyling.
In enilion's?
Love it. Where did you get this picture from? Did someone make it?
Any idea when you plan to release more chapters?
Thank you for the power stones. Your support really helps to motivate me. Take care.