Just read your story, it was bit of rocky start. Took a while to get into but man I am glad I have stuck with this story. It's a really fun and entertaining story. And I am looking forward to seeing more of this story in the future. 🥰👍

Having being of powers explain thing right of the beginning of the story isn't interesting. It ruins so much.

What is this? Ruined my mood for reading this story.

Why is the text bold ? Otherwise it was good chapter

This was really good, I really enjoyed reading this story. It’s a great Star Wars story.

This was very confusing. 🫤 as a first chapter this needs work.

Who are theee çharactere? I am so confused 😕

This us a fun story!

The low bounty gag was funny at first now it's run its course. Chopper gag is because he is viewed as pet. A captain of those bounties would not have a low level bounty.

When are there new chapters? I have already read these chapters on a different site month ago.

What? How did get access to nen. That's huge thing to just gloss over.

Why are you shifting point of view all the time, It doesn’t make for a good story. Sometimes it makes sense but you shift POVs at random and it takes you out of the story. Keep to one POV som one can get to know the main character. The premise of the story was the thing that drew me to this story. But since you hope around the characters like pinball I am out. Good luck with your writing.

If you cant get the name right then dont expect people to enjoy or read this story. Borsalino

Interesting start, but reading about baby for more then a few chapter isnt fun. So hopefully the SI will grow up fast, a few time skips might be in order.👍

Been so long since the last chapter I got no clue what's going any more. More frequent updates please

I really hope he wont sell that book. Great story, looking forward to what comes next!

Interesting start to a story. I am always willing to give Buffy story ago.

He fell of his horse and he proclaimed that he is chosen of the horse God. That would make many question his validity.

I am sorry but jumping form pov to pov of different characters before you even laid the foundation for your main character. That just makes me not want to read more. Cool concept but it need work.

Fix the dialog, because that isn't how you write it. And for me it makes this story unreadable. "Jade:" "Mother:" Rewrite this please. The story premise looked like it could be fun but as it is now. I won't be reading it.