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I appreciate your enthusiasm, but I have some concerns about your story. The first chapter feels broken to me; it skips over the political intrigue at the Meister's Cathedral and misses important bonding moments with the Stark family, which I suspect you'll return to later when necessary. Your self-insert character (SI) has developed some powerful abilities, like casting fireballs, healing any wound, levitating people, and possessing perfect memory—those seem more like superpowers. Additionally, I noticed that your main character hinted at being skilled in sword fighting with two swords, which adds to the issues. While I understand the desire to create a compelling narrative, I generally prefer more realistic stories. It’s difficult for me to stay engaged with a character who seems guaranteed to succeed, especially when they can save everyone, defeat anyone, and even potentially use necromancy. Good luck with your writing, but I’m afraid you’ve lost me from the start with this approach.
I know I’m super late to this chapter and discussion. But I honestly don’t see why so many people are upset. This is not real Life. This is a fantuc and also a Naruto fanfic at that, where 5 to 10-year-olds or killers, murder or worse themselves, and from everyone else’s perspective who read the report it would seem that he did something terrible to that kid's brain even if that kid is an Uchiha prick he should not have done what he did to that kid, even mentally, especially with the Sharon gone. He will remember that forever. He even admits that he shouldn’t have done that to a child later on in the chapter. I think the lesson he learned, was that he needs to check himself because he’s playing around with everybody like it’s a game when it’s not a game anymore or a show for that matter I also don’t think his father would’ve been that upset for an elder teaching him that lesson. Also, it would make more sense that all the elders agree that he needed to learn not to push people just because he thinks he can get away with it or because he’s not thinking about it at all, which the MC admits that he wasn’t even thinking about being punished for it which is very possible, considering that Uchiiha clan is very much addicted to their pride, and having one of their students mind fucked, so it appears by another clan would be cause for drama, so really I think he got off flight and considering he didn’t even think of this scenario or punishment, thus making it a good and needed lesson in the Naruto world and like many other people, I’ve stated do not apologize to simple little losers, who are trying to tell you how to write your book. Not everything is gonna be sunshine and roses in a Naruto fanfic.
Absolutely amazing chapter. This is probably my favorite plot so far great work, man.
History, accurate history, accurate history, accurate