Shrabon4757

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I agree with you. Using Rasengan in a spar is a little bit too extreme. Moreover, using Vanishing Rasengan is overkill.

It's really good. Thanks for the chapter.

To be honest, I have read many fanfics where MC kills both Hiruzen and Danzo just after the beginning chapters Yes, it felt satisfying to see them die. But, this! This gives another level of pleasure! The way Funan has been torturing them from the beginning makes it hundreds of times better. It's just too satisfying!

It's excellent 👌. But it hardly feels like a fanfic of Naruto. But if tou consider it as an individual novel, then it's good. Characters are very realistic, but these counterparts don't match the OG characters in Naruto. At least, the ones who interacted with Main Leads. Their names are also strange as they possessed bodies which already have had their identities. So shouldn't their name be Japanese or at least resemble Japanese instead of American? While the story isn't very fast paced, but MLs are getting stronger at alarming speed. And for some reason, ML Otsutsuki clan is Konohagakure. Shouldn't he be in space with Toneri or even at the Otsutsuki clan? And how is he learning jutsus? Why is like a complete normal shinobi? And Otsutsuki's should look different from humans, so why isn't he questioned? And seeing a Jesus follower, especially in Naruto anime seems really odd. Well, it's not Naruto anime. In the starting, the antagonist I will say, explained that it's a world similar to Naruto, but not Naruto. So all my previous points are invalid. But I just wanted to share my thoughts. I hope you enjoy this novel further and it does well in the future.

One of the best fanfics to ever exist in my opinion. I won't explain the reason, but It's for yours to taste. I am not being biased, but reading these reviews often mislead people. Everyone has individual liking and that is what differentiates us. But before leaving, give it a chance.

It's a good fanfic, hence I gave a high rating. But it's not for everyone. MC uses his powers to help Ino grow, which ticked me off. So I will not be continuing further. I am ticked off because MC himself isn't very capable. It's his system helping him with everything. And seeing him helping others with low potential instead of someone with higher potential ticked me off.

Review based on 74 chapters Writing Quality: I didn't expect a fanfic to have such writing quality. It's on par with experienced authors on webnovel. Updating Stability: Can't say more than it's updated regularly. Story Development: One of the downsides of this fanfic. It's story about a MC who just wants to grow stronger using his Template System. He is no hero or anti villain. He is 'THE VILLAIN'. His only drive is getting stronger. Character Design: Mostly tries to be similar to Gojo Satoru, but is a complete villain. His personality is twisted. He is totally mentally unstable. World Background: These universe traveling fanfics have immense potential, so I rated it high. Otherwise it's about 4 Stars.

It's the longest chapter I have written till now. Hopefully you guys enjoyed it.

Can you guys give me your thoughts on crafting better fighting scenes? I am kinda struggling with fight scene between Takumi and Uchiha Kagero.