AnonymousGhostt
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I'll be honest with you, the story is tedious and boring. In my opinion, the story progressed almost nothing in these last 5 chapters, they were just training and more training. Your story has simply absurd potential, which could easily reach S rank among current fanfics!
When will you release the next chapter? If it's going to take too long, let me know so I don't waste my time waiting.
The grammar has improved a lot, congratulations! I could feel that you were more objective while writing, and instead of going around with useless monologues, you moved the story forward. (written by google translate)
lots of monologues and useless information that add nothing to the story (in my opinion). If you are able to deal with this problem, I think the story can get better!