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BobbyBrowne

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Curbing my boredom with excessive amounts of power fantasy trash. :(

2022-04-09 JointGlobal
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  • BobbyBrowne
    BobbyBrowne8 months ago
    Répondu à Arawn34

    My point still stands that he gets stronger at a snails pace compared to everyone else. If at 200 chapters he's not even a chunin the issue is even worse than I thought. In the anime Sakura becomes a chunin by only punching people and using next to no jutsus, horrible when you look at the mc. If he stands out in a class where everyone is a failure, that doesn't make him a genius, just barely average. I think its major cope to think that he is anywhere near strong if after 200 chapters of relentless, 24 hour training for what I'm assuming to be years, he loses to a single punch from 10 year old Sakura who doesn't train at all.

  • BobbyBrowne
    BobbyBrowne8 months ago
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    An all-round good novel however the pacing and power levels are terrible in my opinion. The author writes scenes well, with interesting descriptions, but they just go on for way too long. His journey to start his training literally takes nearly 100 chapters, and he only uses a crossbow and hope as his weapon before that, mostly after aswell. The system is honestly a curse rather than a blessing, since he can't really grow his stats organically past a normal human, and to put the stats into perspective, normal human is 5, he is 10 after becoming a witcher, normal/most witchers are mid 20s/30s. This is a problem because he gets 1 stat point per level up, and past level 4, it would take about 150 drowners/10 leshen to level up once, which doesn't happen much with the pacing, and only gets worse. At chapter 300 he is still only about level 7/8, which is just kinda ridiculous. To make it clear, I think slow pacing can be okay, but to pull that off, the author would've had to start the story about 20/30 years earlier, to make the power system work, however the MC is only 5 or so years older than Ciri, which really highlights my issues with the power system. In conclusion I think the author has some good ideas, and writes well, but some of his idea's clash in this novel, ruining an otherwise fulfilling novel. Thanks for reading

  • BobbyBrowne
    BobbyBrowne8 months ago
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    If his stats don't grow from training how is he ever gonna get even somewhat strong. He could literally murder 100 dagons and he wouldn't even be at the level of an average witcher. Seems kinda ridiculous especially when normal witchers can grow themselves through combat and time, but he can't. Aside from the insta heal the system seems like it doesn't benefit him much at all

  • BobbyBrowne
    BobbyBrowne10 months ago
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    The novel starts off really exciting but slowly dwindles into a slow, monotonous pace. When the concept of magic is introduced its exciting and you want to see him progress, but the majority of the chapters are just boring occurences and accounts about people that just pale in comparision to him improving. The academy arc is also probably one of the worst ive ever seen, where instead of getting stronger, it seems to exist to make every character catch up to him, all laws are bended so that the MC can't appear too strong, pretty ironic imo. He also starts off in the academy as the strongest student, which just makes the arc inherently irrelevant lol. Acting in tandem with boring nonsense, there is a lot of ridiculous logic in this story. The academy he goes to is this fortified castle that can protect against any danger, except apparently just the strongest person there being a villain, like what? I get trying to make an interesting arc, but there is no way you would build this massive fortified estate, and then not accurately scope out the person running it, especially if every child in your family goes there, it is so unbelievably stupid, like a criminal guarding a bank. The MC also randomly shifts between hiding his power and not, where he hides it from his family for years(for no reason btw) and then randomly brings it up to his cousin about a year before he leaves for the academy?????? Crazy idea, why don't you just go to your extremely loving and all powerful grandad, and just ask him to help you out and show him how talented you are? It's literally the yellow-brick road to success, and he's wading in sh*t thinking it's helping. I could go more but this would be too long, thanks for reading anyways

  • BobbyBrowne
    BobbyBrownea year ago
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    Reading this novel is so incredibly frustrating. For the first 30 chapters or so I was really enjoying him grinding his way from rock bottom to become something, but my man is literally the most nerfed thing in existence. He trains for 18hrs a day and his progress is literally snails pace compared to the other kids who just sleep in class and do some basic exercise. I have never seen an mc with worse talent, but then something happened. The MC awakens his chakra and performs a jutsu incredibly quickly! Ok I'm fine with him being human trash as long as he has at least one strong talen..... Nevermind author said no and he immediately gets nerfed so the snail's pace continues. Even his intelligence gets nerfed somehow and he goes from being smart to an actual primate who is loud and obnoxious, cheers author thought you were going to give him something but nah, how stupid of me. This is already a pretty long scathing review but I can't help but touch on the side characters, they suck. Aside from the old man who i like the side cast the author comes up with(not in naruto originally) are genuinely just terrible, awkard cardboard cutout attempts at characters. They are like a trash harem cast, their personalities can be explained in 2/3 words and i would genuinely prefer if the author replaced them all with nerfing the mc even more. Like why even write a naruto fanfic and just make walmart versions of the original characters instead of using the originals. It would be like me making a bleach fan fic with my new main character ichibo kugosaki who uses a spear and is loud and belligerent, not to be mistaken for his sidekick rubio who has double d breasts and can't stop saying b-b-b-b-bbbaka when Ichibo gets too close to her. I get making up an original character or two to add some spice but just pretty much replacing the main cast makes no sense. This is way too long lol but thanks for reading

  • BobbyBrowne
    BobbyBrownea year ago
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    The novel has so much potential but it just gets caught up on the worst things possible. After a while cultivation doesnt exist and filler takes its place, at one point he goes up one minor realm and gains no powers in 70 chapters, That is just beyond disgraceful in my opinion. The highest cultivation realms are also just never explained, even the highest ranked disciple in his sect is in soul formation realm, but every elder and person he meets later on is at minimum 2 major realms ahead, which makes no sense sect wise. Even the demoness never has her realm revealed and is somehow like 10 major realms ahead of the mc at all times, with no progress in their relationship to look forward to either. I think the novel has immense potential and there are some great characters, but it just feels like there is little to no pursuit in actual cultivation, and instead a pure focus on just filler character interactions, which lose their flare a couple hundred chapters in. Thanks for reading

  • BobbyBrowne
    BobbyBrownea year ago
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    Honestly this could be a good story but I just genuinely can't read it. Nothing makes sense at all and the way the author describes things just leaves me more confused. Like Zuri is a 10cm being who is an ai that gathers info for him and swings his sword for him?? or does she help him swing his sword?? i honestly don't know. The fight scenes are so poorly explained it's like he writes out a whole fight scene, then deletes parts to make it as confusing as possible. The MC will do something you don't understand, then the enemy will put both hands on the ground to brace for impact, then the MC will just attack them from behind, like what?? Even the characters will just completely change their expressions and actions within seconds, someone will be introduced as cool and calculating then act like a literal child 2 secs later, MC included. I just don't understand this novel. Thanks for reading

  • BobbyBrowne
    BobbyBrownea year ago
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    I feel like the author writes this story more on a whim, without much coherent thought behind it. It feels like he just tosses a bunch of information at you at the start of the novel, and then goes off and writes random plot twists dependent on his mood. Characters just perform actions outside of their explained personality, which personally i don't consider character development,character derailment maybe. Way too much time is also spent on random scuffles not really relevant to the story, being labelled as main scenarios, but could honestly be reduced to a chapter or 2 and nothing would change. I think the more egregious thing however is the author biting off more than he can chew. He spends several chapters building up this world based on a potentially predetermined story, and without the readers even knowing much about it, he sets about changing everything. I frankly don't understand setting up this world around certain characters to just add more supposedly, spicing up the novel however I just find it confusing. It's similar to wearing a full suit then just putting on a pair of pink underwear over it for flare, unnecessary. I think trying to add surprising elements to the Mc's background is ok, however shoving it into your face 20 chapters in is just so jarring and such an uncomfortable upset to the pace of the story. It's like if you're reading a novel about killing the demon king, then you spent 20 chapters on stopping some bullying not relevant, 30 chapters on a dungeon that could be 5, meaningless character interactions yes please give me 25, now why don't we make the mc's family secretly demon worshipers and the female lead's family a group of anthropomorphic hamsters, oh wait what was the main goal again, the demon king? The novel is now 100+ chapters and the author is getting tired, demon king is too far away and the hamster arc still needs to be solved, gg go next. If you don't have 600 chapters worth of effort and time to put into a novel, please don't write it as such with so many plot twists and turns before you've even properly started on the main path. Sorry bit of a rant at the end but thanks for reading, even this review could be shorter lol.

  • BobbyBrowne
    BobbyBrownea year ago
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    The author just bites off way more than he can chew, and instead of fleshing out topics, he just adds more to the point where you forget the old ones. It's so infuriating when he talks about a cool mechanic like manipulating nether to create a core, a new energy, then 20 chapters later there's 20 new characters added, 20 new plotlines with the characters, 10 new potential abilities and now he's just playing with a cat that is definitely normal just trust me bro. a prime example is when he trys to recruit someone to a gang, and then before he goes back to finish it, nether manipulation is introduced, his past is exposed adding more characters and backstory to characters, Susan stalks him, conquers a dungeon with new abilities........... blegh just please finish what you start in a reasonable time, or at least don't clutter the story so much in the process.

  • BobbyBrowne
    BobbyBrownea year ago
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    Read up to Ch35 and I still did not feel invested whatsoever and found everything boring. The author tries to shove some psychological damage nonsense down your throat for about 10 chapters straight and I just didn't care. You get barely introduced to about 10 different characters and then are supposed to care about something that happened to the MC 20 years ago that just takes away from the main story progression. The story progression so far is him just coming up with random stuff from a 10 year old and everyone falls prey to the classic "just trust me bro". The only sort of knowledge I have about how the world and powers is from a info dump chapter that resembles a college students notes and doesn't flow well at all. Thanks for reading