HollyLevenson
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HollyLevenson1yrRépondu à Jeffsonwithout reading much? I read 30 chapters, and from what I can see, that is more rhan enough to make a review on it. On the other hand, you seem to have the delusion that your novel is holier than thou. Look at the amount of fans u have. look at how many golden tickets you have. look at how many powerstones you have. I didn't trash on your novel because I like it. I trashed on it because the common consensus is that its bad and most people have dropped it by chapter 30.
- HollyLevenson1yrPosté
Writing quality: 2 stars At least iits readable I guess? The other is a bumbling idiot. he does not know when to zip it when it comes to describing. he repeats himself a lot and its honestly irritating especially when its coming from an author with three novels in his belt. Story development: 1 star Its bad... It's real bad... The story is slow and boring, and I could barely get through 30 chaps to make this review. The pacing reminds of watching a baby trying to walk, which is ironic since the mc seems to have been a toddler his whole life. Character Design: 1 star. Just no... mc is a baby, and all other characters are stupid. COME ONE AUTHOR! YOU'VE WRITTEN THREE BOOKS! i would give this category Zero stars if I could. Update stability: 5 stars Its good. 10 chapters a week. The problem is that despite creating so many chapters a week, its worth nothing when u write garbage. world background: 1 star The power system is atrocious. It makes no sense and its overly complicated. why use the lettering system when they can literally just say the element instead? also, the lettering system is really jumbled up. A is somehow the lowest, while D is like the second highest? what?! unique but it doesn't matter when it doesn't make sense. Overall: just bad. 2 stars don't recommend. I suggest the author drops this and starts reading novels for a change. Maybe then he will know how to make a good novel and keep it alive for longer than 15 chapters. the author deleted my last review so here is a new one.
- HollyLevenson1yrCommentéCh 34 A Place To Eat At The Academy.
- HollyLevenson1yrRépondu à RiCrease
if only we got an explanation from this moron author
Ethan was still standing on that spot with Aiden when one of the nobles close to him began jumping up in joy, he was really elated. And why was he elated? 'Cause his daughter got to awaken an ability, she just came out of the temple. She awakened the earth ability, meaning she was an A-rank bender currently and future F-rank bender. - HollyLevenson1yrRépondu à Heisenberg4k
could never agree more
..Once again, imagine if their house was really far from the temple. - HollyLevenson1yrRépondu à Altara_Blue
agreed
-Function: This is just like an extra when it comes to healing your injuries. Apart from the healing skill, this is also available. So if you choose not to activate the healing skill to heal your injuries, you can drink this potion. - HollyLevenson1yrCommenté
were you making a random list or something?! first off, why is the mana thing at the bottom? at least make it line up with all the other stats. secondly, why is the exp at the bottom?! wouldn't it make sense for it to be right below the level? maybe even right next to it? how can someone's speed be zero? that means he literally cannot move
<(Quests)> - HollyLevenson1yrRépondu à Shadow78910Ch 9 The Chase.
- HollyLevenson1yrRépondu à commander_pride_21
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That's a decision everyone has to make, you choose whether you want to become a warrior or not...and most of the high-ranked chiefs chose not to. And that's where Ethan had the advantage. - HollyLevenson1yrCommenté
if he chooses this I will straight up leave
Harem god? Now, this sounds new to Aiden's ears. - HollyLevenson1yrCommenté
Honestly, this is a pretty good concept. Well done author.
"I'm the god of the apocalypse. If you choose me, you're choosing the path to be reborn into a post-apocalyptic world, a world that has undergone annihilation. And you'll be the chosen one, the one that must bring an end to the apocalypse". The old man responded. - HollyLevenson1yrCommenté
😂😂😂😂
"Life made me do so". - HollyLevenson1yrCommenté
why did this guy become poetic all of a sudden. did death give him some new Shakespearen enlightenment?
"I'm Aiden by name, what of you, what is your name?". Aiden responded throwing back the question. - HollyLevenson1yrRépondu à Sinful_CyanideCh 1 One Shot...And It Was Over.
- HollyLevenson1yrCommenté
you're repeating yourself
This was the type of death Aiden was running from, 'A shot in the face'. Since each of them had gone through some shits in their lives, since each of them had been bullied, they felt they shouldn't care about anything. They were willing to do anything just to survive not caring who it would affect...as far as it would bring in cash. - HollyLevenson1yrCommenté
your writing is so informal, then you throw in a word like "fraternity"
'The Viper' was made up of a group of young lads that felt like the world was unfair. Each of them has gone through some shits in their lives. Each of them has been bullied, almost all of them didn't get to experience the love of a parent. So that's what prompted the fraternity. - HollyLevenson1yrCommenté
why would the boss leader text him at all? I would assume he'd just kidnap him and then tell him why, but to text him? he's the leader of an entire mob and he didn't think that the mc would run away? 🤣
'Today is gonna be your end. Remember our rule, you f**k up, you dare snitch on us, you don't conform to the mission given to you, you dare betray us. You gonna die, you gonna get shot in the face...just one bullet to the face'. - HollyLevenson1yrRépondu à Lovijly