Dealdough_Baggins

You should work on your pronouns, spelling and grammar. It's frustrating how you use "it" to a character, "he/him" to a female, and she/her for male characters. Plot-wise, very inconsistent and lacks detail. Both main characters are boring and plain. There is no character development, whatsoever, and the flow of the story is somewhat fast-paced. The antagonist is not even antagonistic by far. There is no proper conflict. Overall, disappointing.