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Senju_00005 months agoPostéThe story is good, but I remember reading a story with the same premises,vegaon claiming canibal who is scared and with the whole tourney as well. But not sure if it's an inspiration or word to word copy,would need to verify
- Senju_0000a year agoCommenté
- Senju_0000a year agoPosté
A word to word rip off of the original - sunrise.disappointed
Ce livre a été supprimé. - Senju_00002 years agoPosté
The writing and grammer is good but this is exactly word to word the show modern family. The MC has made literally 0 changes in the story and and the places he even appears is when he is also shot with the bb gun alongside Dylan and has a football tryout where Alex visits but other than that he is just at the place listening to everyone,he has less than 3-4 dialogues per chapter is that.
- Senju_00002 years agoCommenté
noooooo, and it was going so good as well
- Senju_00002 years agoCommenté
Old God's vengeance would have been better
- Senju_00002 years agoCommenté
Your stories are really good but you need to work on the POV. There's literally no separation of when one POV ends and another begins
- Senju_00002 years agoCommentéCe livre a été supprimé.
- Senju_00002 years agoCommenté
What? Is zetsu lying for some reason or did you forgot Sasuke wasn't the one who killed him?
Ce livre a été supprimé. - Senju_00002 years agoRépondu à Snipe_Ur_Ass
He didn't kidnap him, he went and recruited him
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