Indian_Painter

Writing quality: 7/10 Decent , but requires some clarity in the narration and the author also overdescribes unnecessary things not need for the plot to progress. It would be better if the author uses shorter paragraphs since the longer ones do make reading monotonous and slow paced in general during an intense scene. Updates 10/10: He updates daily at the time of review Story 7/10: Decent plot points and story. A side note (Personal thing) could have started with a inciting event to hook your readers. Then explain how he ended up there. Character 7/10: Decent cast of characters. Dialogs 7.5/10: Could filter out the filler words (he said, etc.) in some areas. The exchange doesn't seem much monotonous and robot-like, although it could improve it's clarity and variety when other characters are speaking. Grammar 8/10 - decent It's a decent read with a okayish plot. The author is definitely improving his writing, as i could see the quality slightly getting better when we move on. Definitely give it a try -Indian_Painter

Writing quality: 5/10 So basically, the quality of writing is pretty decent,, only not that great since the author is a beginner. The author overdescribes things a lot; even something unnecessary to the plot is described. I hope it gets better later on. Updates 10/10 - He atleast updates daily. Grammar 7/10: Decent but needs some more work, could use some clarity. Also, a, side note - The author should make shorter paragraphs since most of his paragraphs are long sometimes the flow is broken and doesn't feel engaging enough to keep reading Dialogs 6/10: Stop using filler words in every sentence. I can understand who is talking with the flow of the narration; I don't have to keep parrot that "she said" and "He said." The dialogs sometimes seem monotonous Story 7.5/10: It's a decent plot. It seems interesting, can be even better if the author improves it. It can be decent read if the author improves his writing in the long run. Definitely people interested give it shot before judging - Indian_Painter

I didn't notice this let me change it lol I added dead without noticing he is alive

Fairies eh

Huh

Interesting I didn't know about that. But they were mostly big cargo ships made from sturdy timber sourced from Bengal. They were not particularly strong as a naval power since their armaments were limited and lackluster compared to the European ships. They were only better than European ships for carrying cargo.

yes, during the chola period but in this period No

Writing style: 8/10 It is good but could use some work. The author does use some filler words here and there. These filler words can be avoided. Although it does get better as you progress. Story 7.5/10 Generic tower progression fantasy story with a system attached. Although the story is okay, it isn't a breath of fresh air story wise Narration 7/10 Sometimes the narration requires some clarity. Dialogs 7/10 Sometimes the dialogs are monotonous to read. It doesn't give much distinction between characters. Formatting 6/10 System formatting needs some work; it doesn't look neat. Character 8/10 Overall great character of MC, but there are problems here and there with his monotone nature of behaving with others. I think the author can show more of his emotions by showing not telling (Like he is amazed or what not) Overall, a decent read. I would recommend you all to try

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literally show just couple of para back u alchemizer guy