Guard_the_Azkaban

Reply author, this is nonsense, please clarify things.

What the hell does he have magic for if he doesn't use it?

Too over exaggerated, if he had the strength of a Jonin at 12 or 14 it would be better. The fact that I say I win against a kage level powerhouse is too exaggerated and unrealistic.

No, no, no, no and NO!! In what head can you use the rasengan even if you are in the academy and without having a background that supports its use, they are ninjas for God's sake, if you are not wondering where they learned it then this is nonsense, it is a hole in the plot of this Fanfic. The mc cannot go and say that he simply knew it, it is like giving away future knowledge using things he should not know, no self-respecting mc would make such mistakes, he is practically playing with his own life for the good of the plot and the author. , it doesn't make sense and it's not realistic. Doesn't he mind falling into Danzo's hands? How would he know if the Hokage defends him or not? What if they end up subjecting him to interrogations to get the information about where he learned the Rasengan? After all, you have to remember that the mc is a civilian and should not have access to A-rank ninjutsu.

I like this story, it's quite entertaining to a certain extent, but if I had to point out its bad points they would be the following: 1) The romance is too fast, I understand that there may be many romantic interests in the future, but literally profess eternal love on the second day knowing each other is terrible. It would have been better for you to lengthen the travel time between cities or the time they spend outdoors, you know to get to know each other better and so that love is not so forced, you could have used short jumps in time and told the facts in a correct way and concise if it seemed too difficult to you. 2) The way he catches shiny pokemon so easily is baffling, apart from the fact that it would be impossible to find a group of charmanders in the wild (on a very busy route), the fact that he finds so many shiny ones so quickly in the story It's not funny. It's been 4 or 5 days since he was reincarnated and he already has a complete team and two girlfriends for the second gym. 3) The dialogues are too forced and unnatural, they seem like something processed by a computer or a kind of Chinese translation. I mean it's not the worst but it literally kills my excitement watching the dialogue and descriptions. 4) And perhaps the most critical point, limiting movements to only 4 makes no sense in reality.

Hello author, this Fic is honestly an incredible idea, but... the only problem I would like to point out is that in more than 20 chapters not even 1 week has passed, it is very slow and the number of chapters is very small for a so slow pace.

You better not lose any of your girls🙂😤

This is simply unreal, she says she created her magic and her wand, but she never left her house, so she couldn't have obtained materials and been exposed to witches enough to know the identity of the school teachers, she simply doesn't have Sense, it's full of holes and no one halfway intelligent just walks up to it and asks if they can sign up.

Yes they are. The chapters are short and on top of that he repeats explanations of the same thing several times in later chapters whenever the topic in question comes up, that makes him less funny because he doesn't advance almost anything per chapter since he always gets lost in his thoughts and goes back to explaining past things. again and again.

I love it, it's one of the best HP FFs I've ever read. But it has points that can improve, such as how prudish they are with the relationship and the lack of consequences for Harry's enemies, Daphne should never have been attacked, she is from one of the most powerful pureblood families in Great Britain and would have great consequences against their attackers, so they should be safely thrown into Azkaban and anyone in Slytherin house would know it. And the fact that he gets unnecessary enemies is annoying, you should just stick to dealing with Voldemort, Albus and the Weasley's and not bring in more enemies from other students, maybe Malfoy from time to time but not more, otherwise it becomes annoying.