I understand what you mean. This is my first time writing and i can already see mistakes I've made but i think I've = definitely improved as its gone on.
Best story I've ever read on this app. An actual realistic ish main character, who doesn't through the magic of a system turn into michael jordan in his rookie year. The main character, Hector actually fails and learns which is refreshing.
I’v written 2 chapters and you have already read the rest of the story in your mind. If you don’t like it fine but no need to call it bad because of what you assume will happen.