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I liked it. Enjoyed the characters, the plot, the world, however there was one mild thing that annoyed me. The synopsis, the dialogue at the end makes no sense to my mind, he says "Why, you ask?" When the question beforehand was a do. Anyway still liked the novel, and you should still defo give it a try.
the speech marks are a bit excessive
I think it's meant to `isn't here` rather than `is here`
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Brother, that is a WIDE generalisation, the worlds a big place and stereotypes are not always right. There is such a thing as a stay at home father, c'mon bro there's 8 billion people in the world there are not going to always fall into a stereotype.
Realistically though, who would accept that deal?
Not the worst novel i have read. I like the skill idea, that's neat but everything else is a bit meh. Writing quality could be better but has shown improvement over the chapters. Stability of updates is a quality that the novel does not shine in, a one month break is fine though as long as they keep up writing. Story development is great, i don't hate any of it i find the parallel world gimmick to be nice and overall is good. character design get a 4 because its to early to give it any lower but you may want to give your character some more personality. Also spending 73 points on luck on a test, no a quiz is infuriating and you may want to revise that as it comes of as rather wasteful to become the god of luck to ace a quiz world background great to early to give it any lower but is rather generic so 4 Some good websites to fix grammer is stuff like https://quillbot.com/grammar-check and https://chat.openai.com/auth/login just make sure to run through it to check its not being non-sensical
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I was just implying the social issues of volunteering. Patriotism is great, loving the country your in, is fine but when people around you start volunteering for war, inevitably you will feel pressure on doing so as well. t's also about the shame one would get for not volunteering, you would be seen as a cowards and would face social discrimination. Volunteering is all about free will and if someone did not make that decision completely of their own free will, then it was not volunteering, say for instance if a parent forces you to help your neighbour, that's not volunteering, your were asked and you did what you were told, The neighbour may see them as a volunteer but ultimately they weren't, they were forced. Enough typing this long reply, I agree on using the wrong word and will change it just wanted to explain my opinion.
So yeah it does not say world domination but it implies so I'm putting it in the synopsis. I'm not lying. I'm implying.
The novel is set in his mind and the only thing i could think of is he grows use to it, i may add, him thinking about how it's inconvenient. But right now his mind had other more pressing priorities. I did not mention this but it's his left arm and he's a righty so for the most part he is fine. Thanks for bringing this up, your feed back was very helpful.