Ozymandias007i

Thank you so much.

Okay so this is very good. Somewhat cliche here and there but the fresh story and setting really bring this to live. Taking the familiar and making it seem fresh is quite an achievement The author writes very well. It's simple , direct but very effective. Really helps paints images in my mind effectively. Please keep on writing cause you're really gifted.

I think your command of English is very good. Even though there are some grammatical and errors here and there I still get the sense of what you're trying to say which is good. Keep on working and reading English novels from native speakers and your English will be on par with them if not better. Your world and story is interesting. It's well paced which is good and it's been engaging this far. Keep on working. There's definitely some potential in this story.

This is a story that's absolutely filled to the brim with some exceptional descriptions and writing. The pacing is perfect and helps create suspense. This is a genuine page turner.

Thank you so much!

The story initially doesn't balance it's ideas well in the beginning and it did hurt the pacing but it eventually found its groove and I pretty much enjoyed it. Hopefully the story remains consistent but I like what I see so far.

I absolutely love the use of metaphors. It makes it seem like I'm reading a very long poem. There are occasional grammar errors and awkward sentence structure but overall it's a solid story.

This is brilliant. The synopsis gave me just information to spark my curiosity but the book is so much more. The plot really is the strongest aspect of the story so far. Well - paced with cliffhangers that left me wanting more.

Solid first chapter. Eager to see how it progresses

Other than the grammatical errors and use of emojies this is a great story with a lot of potential. You've found a balance with a lot of themes that other authors don't handle as well. Keep on working on it.