ARnab

Romance in Paris, what's better then that classic setting? The plotline and the FMC are really complementing to each other. One magnifies the other's beauty. A simple drunken bet being the driving force of the story and the various incidents in the daily life of the characters being so relatable really stirs a perfect combo of a little fantasy in real life. Besides the author's writing style of telling the story to the readers from a third person pov is the best way I like reading a romance novel.❤️❤️❤️

Is it showing?

The story is quite good but it has a lot of errors with punctuations and grammatical factors. I think you should review the draft after you complete writing before you publish the chapters cause those mistakes take a lot out of the story and destroys its flow. I also think you should put a little more work in the dialogues and some of them are really out of order. I hope you don't take it the wrong way. Keep up writing.

A better use of punctuations will make readers more attached

the " s in this para are out of the mark

and a long blue dress ( wearing instead of and would be better IMO )

And my entire family... ( it's quite odd and a little bit out of the line )

honest,I

Bostic, North Carolina

Duskman,I