KodiakGod

well done 👍, besides some grammar issuses here and there (nowhere near as bad as I've seen on this sight) I was very intrigued. I also think you did a pretty good job of keeping singed in relative character.

I've just read a lot and had a few classes on writing (still in one)

it 's the slightly slanted words (second in the gif)

Thanks for the chapter, these have been pretty good so far. In regards to showing emotion, with the show don't tell philosophy you could bring attention to like their jittering hands or darting eyes and sweaty brow something like that if they're nervous. but then again that's just some general advice, I'm not a writer,(yet) but keep up the good work [img=recommend]

if a character is thinking you should put it in italics or within a border [] {}, helps differentiate between the actions/thoughsts

Hope you're feeling better, flu freaking knocks you out, had a little bit ago and I was bedridden.

See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

it was probably something like blood coming out of his mouth or face because his body was already in very bad condition, especially his heart, and he was punched in the heart in this chapter and he also used removal which has got to be bad.

essentially there is no harm in making friends with Arthurr. It's better to be on the friendly side of someone who grows stronger every day, then not to be.