ragga_sharma

I would say the story development, depiction and how it came out was brilliant, the suspense at last was good, but there were some sentence errors in the third chap. when she was lying in the jungle. The description of the scenario was amazing, but a little touch of perfection in creating a better imagery of the scenario and the place and a little more details could have made the story more interesting, tough it is very interesting, no doubt, it could be refined a little more. It is the small small things that count. And one thing in particular was when the lady abused the kid, I believe every adult has that much decency to not abuse a child (* until it is a pseudo feminist, anti-national, anti-social element like Swara Baaskar), in short it could have been avoided. Overall it was an amazing elaborate and quite entertaining story. Looking forward for more Chapters.