Withered_Oblivion

Ofc ofc

I just wish the chapters were a little more consistent even if it’s not every day. The on and off and not knowing when next the chapters will come is draining and annoying

Tbh this is great story so far. I hope you continue to take ur time and don’t rush the story. There are a lot of details that can be fleshed out to give the story more depth. But Yh great story! Keep it up author👍🏽 -Mim

There is an issue with the text colour here

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An hour….

I feel like the hand placements are off…

Ur sentences run on too long thoughts don’t run on like paragraphs. You should seperate it into parts. Also. Again. Grammar

U should get someone look through and fix grammar/ simple mistakes. Also don’t make paragraphs so big. Mhm these things put people off or make reading look daunting. Just my opinion. Hope it helps

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