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I agree, I will try to make him talk in his usual personality.
It's from the all the shouting he did, not the fighting, I apologize if it didn't make sense. I'm kinda learning as I go, like in my head it sounded great, but I guess not :)
Hey, Gh0st00! It's a great question man. To clear the plot hole up, Even though Adrian controls his shadows, just bringing characters like Arlong into the scene where they wouldn’t normally appear can change the story's dynamics. The presence of these characters can influence other characters' decisions or attract attention that wouldn’t otherwise be there. Also, Adrian has to be super careful. Using such powers, even secretly, might lead to unexpected outcomes or shift how other characters view him. It’s all about the butterfly effect, small changes can lead to big shifts, especially in a world as volatile as One Piece. Also, I do admit it's hard to make a new storyline as a new author especially when the world is already built and lore's are so in-depth. Hope this clears things up a bit!
Omg! thank you for telling me that CodeKingu. I usually write those so that I remember what to put in for the next chapter. I tend to plan ahead on each chapter so I can remember what to write. About Garp and Bogart, just to clears things up. I like to visualise stuff and Garp was heavily breathing from shouting and talking a lot. Don’t we all? ;)
Hi Xedron, thank you for your comment! Regarding the MC, I wanted to give a new perspective on an overpowered MC without having to fight himself too much. Adrian is still learning the ropes and still have fears. I try to make him as relatable to us, giving you the question of what would you do in his place? So Adrian will not have any ability from his shadows but keep reading to see that your ideas will be put in :) Thanks again Xedron.
Hello CodeKingu, I'm just a new author, and yeah, I've made a lot of mistake during the writing process. My grammar was terrible and the plot was all over the place. To fix the issues, I used ai tools to refine my work. I don't deny that I use ai, but the story was NOT ai generated. And if it makes the story more smooth and readable, then why not? was it wrong to utilize the power of ai? Regarding the MC's decision to be on the sideline and watching the straw hats fight, this was an intentional decision made by me. As a One Piece fan myself, I want to offer a unique perspective from the eyes of the MC, rather than making him join the fight. I agree that he's more of a side character in this world right now, but please continue reading the story in the future. I promise your opinion will change. :)
Begging was part of his job then, so it didn't break any rules.
Thank you! I'll try my best to update as fast as I can.