Just no. This novel collects everything about this genre that is hated and shoves it into one novel. I don’t mind, I knew exactly what I was about to read, I’ve read the same thing a thousand times, that’s an issue, but not the main one. Anyone who isn’t as autistic as both our protagonist and every single character in the story, anyone who has the vaguest idea of how money works, will read the chapter explaining money and drop the novel.

Get this man his “it’s Yuna” folder

Good luck, comrade. You’ll need it

In case Webnovel doesn't register this, I'm the author. Honestly, I have no clue what I'm doing, I'm just writing and hoping it all comes together nicely, or writing to fix where it doesn't. This is the first time I've written anything along the lines of fiction, so my storytelling ability likely isn't all that great. I can guarantee that the quality of writing is great. The synopsis explains what's going to happen pretty decently, in my opinion, and the general flow of the novel is going to be slower-paced until everything begins to happen at once. If this helps you decide whether or not to check it out, great, if it doesn't, that's fine too. The choice is yours.

I have not. Never really needed make one, though I might to join the Webnovel server

Ah. Paragraphs of speech from one person only use a closing " on the final paragraph. It's to show that the same person is speaking.

I believe I know which paragraph you are talking about, and it does look a bit off on a phone, but opening a new paragraph makes it look even odder. On the laptop I use to write/proofread, it looks perfectly normal, so I won't be making any changes.

Yup. I want to establish Clara as a character first, so not for a bit.

It usually follows Clara. These are more of an optional read, a really long prologue.

F

A bun in the oven

Writing on a smartphone sounds like a nightmare, I can't imagine how hard that must be. As for improvements, as of Ch. 37, the writing is much more smooth and flows better. Keep up the good work, and never stop improving!

I like it. It's pretty similar to The Novel's Extra and The Author's POV. Anyone who's read either can pretty much predict where the story is going to go, which isn't necessarily bad. I can't really say much when it comes to the world and characters because the novel is newer and there aren't a lot of chapters. Character development is really what makes these kinds of stories stand out from the rest; when storylines are similar, it's the characters that determine if the novel is good or bad. Both the world and the characters have room to grow. What really hurts this is the grammar. It's legible, and that's about it. Most of the people on Webnovel probably aren't real strict about grammar, but it's also clear where good grammar is what determines which novels people keep reading and which ones are dropped. A few things I'd like to point out: Run each chapter through Grammarly. The free version works very well. It's a great way to improve grammar. Periods go inside of quotes. I noticed this a lot in Ch. 17. It should be: "Blah blah blah." instead of "blah blah blah". The same rule is true for commas. A lot of the sentences are broken; it feels like words are missing. Finally, use commas. I see a lack of commas in a lot of novels. It's more of an experience thing, deciding where to place them, but reading well-written works helps with figuring out where to place them. I was taught to read each sentence out loud, and to put a comma where I naturally paused. Overall though, it's a good story with potential, worth a try if you like this kind of novel.

Is that EB+? The artist, I mean

Return of the Crazy Demon. It’ a gem s

Shiro?

All hail the Dao of Cake

90s

Someone get the swear jar

Probably in Ghislaine’s case, but you could make an argument for the two sisters, that they saw him as a childhood friend and eventual romantic interest.