kolopee
I use this app to read shitty, but fun stories nonetheless.
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Okay so.. this novel is starting off great but there are some problems which i personally think you should fix 1st - the writing quality. dont get me wrong here, it is average or even above on this app but the dialogues are like they lack the “humanism”. when there is a dialogue, it feels like programmed robots talking. try to add more dots, !, ? and other things that would make the writing quality more readable and more comfortable to read 2nd - there are too little details - for an example, i totally have no ideo how the characters look, while some people like little details, you should still atleast try to explain how the main cast looks 3rd - fast pacing - again, some people will like this, some will not but the story we have now, feels a little too fast for me otherwise, this is a good novel that you can probably expect good things from in the future (i hope), so as of now, i reccomend it to read this, because the story is interesting enough and good luck to the author with this project[img=recommend]