nebulaandsupernova

The story is very vivid, and the writing is truly immersive. There are a few grammatical errors in some place, and sometimes the dialogue structure is hard to follow. However, these are all quick fixes, and it is interesting to see where this story will go. Great work!

The synopsis is crafted to perfection- it's magnetic. The first chapter is almost overwhelming with names and descriptions, but it serves to deliver a vivid setting. The story also portrays human emotion very realistically. It is very interesting so far. Keep up the good work.

Strong characters are the most interesting aspects that your book has. It is also very visually descriptive, and you have set up a very interesting dynamic, that can go places. Great work!

The whole gravity of the situation the protagonist encounters hits from the beginning and it continues to build momentum from there. The characterisation is also quite haunting and the fight scenes have a high tension. However, the setting itself is a little disorienting as there's little to no description of it so the image is harder to visualise and there is lesser immersion. The plot has many elements that have potential to be a grear story and it's certainly exciting to see the pursuit of revenge as a plot element.

One can tell that a lot of thought has been put into the creation of this new fictional world. The blend of description and plot drive is also balanced quite well. However, the lack of full stops and appropriate punctuation is jolting as I had ro read certain parts again to find a pacing that made sense. Overall, the story has much potential and I'm interested to see where it will go :)