And by the way, it's not necessarily be "My eyes fixed on Danton"... This small line is up to you

It's a no problem pal

"As I heard *him* say"

Another suggestion my friend for the first few lines. I hope you don't mind ahehe... "My eyes fixed at Danton, I got shocked as I heard.... *and so on*" Btw, I enjoyed reading this from the start

A suggestion for the stuttering part. Instead of putting dots, why not "I-I" and "Wo-Won't"