So far, aside from a few grammar errors here and there, this is a rather interesting story that is shaping up to be pretty good. Though I do suggest toning down some of the more adult moments I still enjoyed giving this story a quick read

From what I've read so far, this story is shaping up to be a really good work. There are a few grammar errors here and there but nothing that can't be fixed. Regardless this story could shape up to be something people will greatly enjoy.

Thanks very much for your input, I'll definitely try and make it more of an experience, especially in some more stories I have planned.

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Thank you very much for your feedback, I'll still try to work on shortening my paragraphs and put some work on the dialogue as well.

Thank you very much, I try to work them out into smaller paragraphs yet they somehow end up long page-sized pieces, I will also try to elaborate more on the MC's feelings as best I can. I also thank you for noticing the details of the surroundings, in most fantasy movies, shows, and books the details of surroundings is important, at least to me. Thank you very much for your comment, I will do my best to improve to make this a more interesting story.