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Oh my bad, its for UK monarchies, which my monarchy is based out of, not british monarchies.
That would be for now. However, for old british monarchies, honourable was used for children of barons. They would normally be called "The Hons" or "Honourables" since Lady and Sir was used for higher ranking nobles
My bad! Thanks for pointing that out, I fixed everything up till the most recent chapter
I made a mistake in just including his age in the synopsis and the latter chapters but his real age is 28!
Hehehe, it shows that they aren't that close
I can see the world building and it was what hooked me. However, there were spots where I got confused on who's talking and what was happening. Also the lack of names make it feel like every other person except for the MC is unimportant and just some background character. The plot has potential although the writing could use some work. It's a great sci-fi fantasy mix and would love to read more in the future.
Hmm, you keep using "soon enough", probably better if you try to limit that.
I had a hard time understanding the story at first. The only way I could understand was because of the title and synopsis. Maybe you can work around being more clear in the story and more descriptive about what happened. The characters are likeable since they seem to be really good friends and are very open to one another. All in all, it's still an interesting story and it keeps me thinking about how getting transported to another world changed ryan so drastically. Keep up the good work!
My bad! I meant to write it that way and totally forgot to read back. I was too focused on creating the ending of the chapter that I overlooked it! Thank you for reminding me!
It's a very light and fun read. Although the grammar can use a bit of work, but I can understand if it's not your first language. All in all, fun to read and looking forward to the story development. I got confused with the spacing at the first chapter but it got better as I read it. Keep up the good work!
It's a good read, although I would prefer some more context on how the magic worked. The protag is cunning and smart and makes use of his knowledge from the future. I wish we could find out more about the protag himself from before he became Samuel and the things he did. It might help make this image of a smart and cunning Samuel more concrete. Other than those, I love the dialogue and the interaction between the characters. It's also nice to seem some bits of action at the start of the story!
Female lead's personality is engaging and the story is okay albeit confusing to read when it swaps POV from the protag to the person watching the screen. I like the story and how it is progressing. One tip would be to make the system choices a lil bit cleaner to make it easier to read! Other than that overall good read!
This hooked me, great writing!