TDWSF

Never seen this one on a relationship with an MC. Could be nice I think?

Started great went to sh*t.He makes friends and they die.He makes a friend/flirt and she dies.I guess the only way for the MC to have character development is for people close to him die.I don't even want to get in to the fact that he just left a friend alone in a dangerous mission.He just assumed she would be okay and just left.THE MC IS JUST FU*KING STUPID.

MC could've changed the outcome of this WHOLE operation but he did NOTHING?? For the entire chapter he just WATCHED as things happened??? I hope this doesn't turn out to be one of those fanfic that the MC trains like a madman but when it matters the most he just let things happen to preserve the canon.This chapter just sucked.

For immortality there is a filler arc(i think) that has something called Stone of Gelel on Naruto.Look it up if you don't know maybe you could use that if it is feasible.

I've been on Webnovel(and other platforms of course) for years and from quality work to wish fulfillment works I read almost EVERYTHING on Webnovel.This is one of the best fanfiction in this site.Characters feel like they are alive.They are not words in an Ff.Just like almost everyone in this site everyone seems to forget that Good Dialogues turns ordinary stories into amazing stories.Nothing happenes story wise or action wise but so far the story is Good. Keep up the good work please.

There aren't a lot of good TWD fanfics and this is very good.Mc is not an idiot so far and he thinks and does logical things.Survival being his first priority is smart and as you know there aren't a lot of MC's that are smart.Plase keep up the good work.Thanks a lot man.

He just creates an AI in 4 hours with 1 computer?? And he says that it is more advanced then any AI??? I get that he is from 2059 or whatever but that's the most illogical thing I've ever heard.Where are the servers of Iris? Where is it's processing parts? She can just hack anything like Shield and stuff in a couple of hours?? That 1 paragraph where Iris was created was the equivalent of like 5-10 chapters and you just skipped it? The story was going good and you suddenly destroyed it.I'll keep reading because it still has potential but I hope it doesn't happen again.

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