Author of The Hidden Secret of the Yakuza. [OLD ACCOUNT.]
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want to hug him <3
I NEVER would have guessed this was her method after reading the synopsis o_o
:D Aww, thank you. However, this one has been dropped. I have rewritten this with the title "The Hidden Secret of the Yakuza."
I think the writing improved as the chapters progressed, but I think the author could benefit from reading other books and becoming more familiar with the craft of writing. To really draw readers into the story, the author should focus on developing clear and detailed descriptions of characters, settings, and events. You have picked a strong storyline (murder & revenge) and if it's done well, it can be really interesting. I wish you the best of luck in polishing and shaping your story.
The world of this story is clearly a very magical and interesting one! I'm really curious to see how world-building develops as the story unfolds. The main character is still rather unknown, and deservedly so, as it has only been two chapters. I'm hoping he will have some exciting adventures and that his journey will be filled with magical surprises. It's fascinating to see how this world's many elements will affect and shape his journey. Good luck with your work, I will definitely follow it. <3
They have a really epic title :-D love dragons!
A proper review based on the first three chapters is early, so I might edit it later. Although it's difficult to say how well the world-building is done, there is at least some sort of magic, which is a plus for me. MC is still mystery, so hopefully his character development will be interesting. It's pretty easy to read the text. In my preference the synopsis is a bit too long and overly descriptive. Reading about plot twists is more interesting for me when I'm already invested in the characters. Good luck with your work.