Canadian_Llama

Honestly, I like where this story is heading and have been here since when you first published the story… even after the rewrite. Very descriptive and detailed. The author doesn’t just sudden introduce new characters, leading to a more structured and flowing storyline/plot. I really feel like this story should be more popular than it currently is. Probably just need to add more tags to the story to bring in new readers. Other than that can’t wait to see how the story progresses.

Noted, will keep it consistent next time

Black Clover?

The start was slow, but that doesn’t mean you should rewrite the story. Everyone writes the beginning of stories differently in hopes to creating the transition they need to connect the events they want. I’d just continue writing if I were you since you’ve been doing pretty good so far. +1

Tbh needed a character that if I introduced early on the will have no major impacts on the story-line. Especially since Ymir is a character with no real “character” or persona, i thought it will be best to use her as rhe connection to AOT.

It is a different font, I am able to see it from my phone.

I saw your comment man. that is just one subtle introduction. I will be introducing goddesses that are original characters later in the story, and my character, I repeat will not be getting his memories back. He will hear stories about him from before, but his answer will be that he is not that guy and he is he. I just used that preface to explain why he had some sort of cheat in the beginning, getting the Biomnitrix. He will have a relationship with them, but nothing based from the previous one he had. This is not going to be any xianxia, I read too many of them before hoping to find a good one, but never found, no young master bs. Also, I am not a fan of the chinese cultivation system, so that will definetly not be included. Just wanna let you know that I hear what you have to say.

I’ll try not to make it boriNg XD

Don’t worry it will be a but before he gore to the AOT world, he just basically gained access to it thriugh Ymir.

I like your thinking there