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shadow_serpent2dCommentéI'm gonna cry. was so excited to see him get them just to be cut off. I feel betrayed. this novel is fantastic and hilarious. The Grammer is fine with little to no mistakes and everything else is done well. My only complaint is there aren't more chapters. Keep up the great work author!!
Ch 30 Surprise!- shadow_serpent7dCommenté
this chapter has quite a bit of errors/ repetitions.
The warmth of a home-cooked meal, the quiet companionship – it was a strange comfort in this fortress of shadows. But the real test loomed. Today was the day I was thrown into Mother's "garden." - shadow_serpent9dCommenté
toru should be waifu. Harem is for the weak.
Toru`s smile was too precious for the world. The world was not worthy of such beauty. - shadow_serpent9dCommenté
class*
"Ladies and gentleman, Heros and heroines!!! Let us welcome the calss which manage to survive a villain attack as first years!!" Present Mic yelled and the people erupted into an excited cheer. - shadow_serpent9dCommenté
instead of using ground twice. change it to earth the first time.
Ce paragraphe a été supprimé. - shadow_serpent13dCommenté
please don't make him have to shout the name of his skills to activate.
To make chants served a dual purpose: not only did they facilitate casting spells by guiding the flow of mana, but they also helped Sebastian memorize the process. - shadow_serpent20dCommenté
Pick one. Get to know them both. Then choose. orrrr have readers choose waifu. (I vote Ranni)
I didn't like spending money, but this could be a great opportunity to get closer to Ranni .. or Mikeyla .. ughh I'm the worst, just pick one .. or pick all? - shadow_serpent23dCommenté
you should be more consistent with when he calls out his attacks if he's going to. However, It'd be better if he just mental casted the spells/skills (in my opinion)
"Aquakinesis!" - shadow_serpent28dCommenté
I feel like this is outta place. it should either be changed or just deleted in general.
It happened very fortuitously. - shadow_serpent30dCommentéCh 187 Chapter 187- Road Trip In An Apocalyptic World
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no such thing
I think I went overboard and made the chapter too long - shadow_serpent1mthCommenté
??
I pity the poor sap that has to ascend to the next circle without my [Cultivation] skill. - shadow_serpent1mthCommentéCh 180 Chapter 180- Fire Lead
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I feel like the "gosa waters" is repeated to much here.
After four days of flight, they had reached the coastline of Gosa Waters.detailSchool Transmigration: I, Chosen as the Saint by Dragons at the StartFantaisie · Sesame_Cookies - shadow_serpent2mthCommenté
just finished my binge read of this lovely novel and now it's time for a mini-review!!Overall, the story is superb. Although it does take a bit to pick up in pace, it's worth the wait. The slight errors in Grammer are neglible. Overall a great read. Can't wait for more!(side note- it'd be interesting if mc could use his quirk to maybe give/alter people's quirk factor. or maybe his at least. Only reason I say it'd be possible is when he mentioned how he shape-shifts, Like his body is lines of code and he just edits it. He could do that to others once he reaches a certain mastery over his quirk. Just a thought.)
Ch 85 Chapter 84:- Attackers Identity - shadow_serpent2mthCommenté
because the only other powered person he's seen other than him and David is there? I feel like that's a good reason.
With little time for contemplation, Malachi decided to inform the group upstairs first that they were safe to come outside. There was no specific reason for choosing this group first; it was a quick, instinctive decision. - shadow_serpent2mthRépondu à Bodhi_sattva
no problem! I try to do it when I catch repeated mistakes. I'd recommend re-reading what you have posted so far and check for errors.
Ce paragraphe a été supprimé. - shadow_serpent2mthRépondu à Kinshu_War
I am now far more inclined to read this through. However, small tip, you often no place "i" before "am" so it comes as "am sorry, ____"
But what he or Lovette didn't expect was that that very determination would be a catalyst of something much greater and beautiful in Cole's journey. - shadow_serpent2mthRépondu à Kinshu_War
hopefully no harem.
But what he or Lovette didn't expect was that that very determination would be a catalyst of something much greater and beautiful in Cole's journey.