I know you wanted me to edit this for you but I really don't see any need for it. The story is really interesting and I can't find many issues at all. Happy writing! ^-^

I absolutely love the way this is written! I am reminded of a real Anime when I read this and it's the type of thing I really enjoy. It's a very charming book and I can't wait for the next upload, keep it up! <3

XD not really child-kidnapping. more like adopting LOL But that would be an interesting concept though. I'll keep it in mind.

I am going to upload the parts I have up on WP here soon, just keep waiting!

Thanks for your feedback! I appreciate it.

It was a very good story and I really can't find much to fault with it. I am going to say though that you should try using a wider range of Vocab, it helps. ^w^