GrizzlyKuma

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Currently @chap38: So far the development of the story is good. The power of the MC is quite unique compared to other one piece fanfics. However, there are problems that needs to addressed because it is really important towards the later development of the story. The first problem is that the author lacks creativity in using the power of the MC. So far, about each level of magic, the MC only uses one skill/spell. Shouldn't there other types of spells at the same level?? Lastly, all spells are offensive type with no varieties. There are a lot of ways in using magic you know?? And also, I see what you did there. Creating multiple accounts to raise your rating higher and putting it in the novel section instead of the fanfic section to eliminate competition. It’s not that relevant to the fic but damn, that’s definitely a sign of someone not confident of their work. All in all, It’s promising.

Nice

Nice

Nice

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