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2020-08-27 JointGlobal
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  • ZABbbbbb
    ZABbbbbb1yr
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    Awesome story, author-san! Was hooked right from the beginning. When I finished it, I really craved for more. I was also a little peeved that there werent any more chapters. I would definitely support this novel to the end, author-san. Anyway, the plot was awesome and deep research had went into making it. A huge winner in my book. The background was so cool and they were defined so perfectly. The side-characters were truly alive and I wish you would flesh them out more. All of this differentiates this book from the thousands of others. This is definitely going to succeed. I'm betting on it, author-san.

    Seven Layers of Hell
    Fantaisie · Kamelzy1
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  • ZABbbbbb
    ZABbbbbb1yr
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    Now, this is a story worth reading. Unlike all the system novel, it doesnt start straightaway with a system and there is a much needed background to the MC. I also like the grounded-reality of the whole novel. A definite five-star novel in my opinion. Best of luck, author-san. I would definitely like to see much more of this novel.

    Spy Mage System
    Fantaisie · GMSJakers
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  • ZABbbbbb
    ZABbbbbb1yr
    Répondu à Ninestar619_5803

    Thanks for your information. Will check it out immediately. It was only a minor inconvenience but still I am glad that there is a chapter explaining it. Thanks a lot

    EDEN LOCKER 'S MAGUS SYSTEM {I-XI} And THE BLACK CREST FAMILY
    Fantaisie · Ninestar619_5803
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  • ZABbbbbb
    ZABbbbbb1yr
    Répondu à Ninestar619_5803

    Okay, got it! Thanks for clarifying. Will check it out immediately!

    Ch 13 "We will keep you like a gold"
    EDEN LOCKER 'S MAGUS SYSTEM {I-XI} And THE BLACK CREST FAMILY
    Fantaisie · Ninestar619_5803
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  • ZABbbbbb
    ZABbbbbb1yr
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    The story is awesome! There are many stories which have the same betrayal and time travel thingies but this is an original. I liked it and was thoroughly engrossed. There is a need for proofreading but other than that, the story is very fine. Would definitely recommend it to others. There is however one thing that confused me. From the first two chapters, it is abundantly clear that the MC Eden knew of the Chains of Dedra, which from this chapter has something to do with torture and the release of a super powerful dude. So, if MC Eden travelled back in time, how did he not know the existence of these three men who are out to capture him? Hmmm.... I think there is some clear mismatch here and would like author-san to correct it. Anyway, I wholeheartedly think this is an honest mistake and wouldnt pay too much mind to it. Author-san, best of luck and please dont stop writing.

    EDEN LOCKER 'S MAGUS SYSTEM {I-XI} And THE BLACK CREST FAMILY
    Fantaisie · Ninestar619_5803
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  • ZABbbbbb
    ZABbbbbb1yr
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    Now this is a little confusing. From the first two chapters, it is abundantly clear that the MC Eden knew of the Chains of Dedra, which from this chapter has something to do with torture and the release of a super powerful dude. So, if MC Eden travelled back in time, how did he not know the existence of these three men who are out to capture him? Hmmm....

    Ch 13 "We will keep you like a gold"
    EDEN LOCKER 'S MAGUS SYSTEM {I-XI} And THE BLACK CREST FAMILY
    Fantaisie · Ninestar619_5803
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  • ZABbbbbb
    ZABbbbbb1yr
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    fired.... what kind of a name is it? Wouldnt it be confusing if someone says 'HEY, YOU'RE FIRED!' Is he stating the obvious, i.e., his name or is he firing him from his job?

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    EDEN LOCKER 'S MAGUS SYSTEM {I-XI} And THE BLACK CREST FAMILY
    Fantaisie · Ninestar619_5803
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  • ZABbbbbb
    ZABbbbbb1yr
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    So an unknown entity gifted the system to MC and the system is gifting something else to the MC. Sounds like a good deal to me. Where can I get such a system?

    [AS A START, THE SYSTEM WILL ALSO GIFT YOU WITH A SPECIAL RARE ELEMENT]
    EDEN LOCKER 'S MAGUS SYSTEM {I-XI} And THE BLACK CREST FAMILY
    Fantaisie · Ninestar619_5803
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  • ZABbbbbb
    ZABbbbbb1yr
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    So... who gifted the system to MC? A god?

    [YOU HAVE BEEN GIFTED WITH A SYSTEM ON THE OCCASION OF THIS SPECIAL DAY]
    EDEN LOCKER 'S MAGUS SYSTEM {I-XI} And THE BLACK CREST FAMILY
    Fantaisie · Ninestar619_5803
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  • ZABbbbbb
    ZABbbbbb1yr
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    A system actually wishing the MC happy birthday. This is a joke, right? How can there be such a good system? I must be dreaming....

    [HAPPY BIRTHDAY HOST! HOST NAMED: EDEN LOCKER]
    EDEN LOCKER 'S MAGUS SYSTEM {I-XI} And THE BLACK CREST FAMILY
    Fantaisie · Ninestar619_5803
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  • ZABbbbbb
    ZABbbbbb1yr
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    Gate to Golden Bridge... that's quite a name alright. I like it!

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    EDEN LOCKER 'S MAGUS SYSTEM {I-XI} And THE BLACK CREST FAMILY
    Fantaisie · Ninestar619_5803
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  • ZABbbbbb
    ZABbbbbb1yr
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    Wow... a protagonist ordering a system. Did I wake up on the wrong side of bed?

    "SYSTEM! I BEG YOU! CONSUME ALL MY MANA AND TAKE ME BACK IN TIME! TAKE ME BACK TO LEVEL ZERO! I ORDER YOU!"
    EDEN LOCKER 'S MAGUS SYSTEM {I-XI} And THE BLACK CREST FAMILY
    Fantaisie · Ninestar619_5803
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  • ZABbbbbb
    ZABbbbbb1yr
    Répondu à SoniiNaaz

    gotcha

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    Queen Of Slaves
    Histoire · SoniiNaaz
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  • ZABbbbbb
    ZABbbbbb1yr
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    Awesome book, author-san! I was captivated by the first minute and I couldn't move my eyes for fifteen minute straight. It was a fantastic read and definitely in my top fav originals. Please dont stop writing. This book is bound to blow up!

    Subduing The Devil Overlord
    Fantaisie · NyxReveuse
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  • ZABbbbbb
    ZABbbbbb1yr
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    Awesome chapter! So cool. Hope to see more!

    Ch 2 Talking To The Moon
    Subduing The Devil Overlord
    Fantaisie · NyxReveuse
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  • ZABbbbbb
    ZABbbbbb1yr
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    Wow... such cruelty. Being called a fairy isnt that bad so why this reaction? Strange....

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    Subduing The Devil Overlord
    Fantaisie · NyxReveuse
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  • ZABbbbbb
    ZABbbbbb1yr
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    Thank you author-san.

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    Subduing The Devil Overlord
    Fantaisie · NyxReveuse
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  • ZABbbbbb
    ZABbbbbb1yr
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    Awesome start author-san. got me hooked with just the first three chapters. I liked mey's character the most. So cheerful,so honest to herself, dayum I wish I was this honest with myself. I also liked the mc fenhua and the others. waiting to see more. also just a pet peeve of mine but please don't write country z and city j. I like countries and wish to travel the world if I can so seeing country z and city j just... breaks my heart.

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  • ZABbbbbb
    ZABbbbbb1yr
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    Please not country z again... where are all the cool countries?... 😔😔😔😔

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  • ZABbbbbb
    ZABbbbbb1yr
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    something is wrong with this sentence.

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