tuba_san
well, hello there.
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found you!
cease
Overall the plot is a bit rushed in my opinion. I think you should try to add some atmosphere, do some world building, that might help the pacing a bit. Other then that it's just the grammar and writing that needs a whole bunch of work. To improve your own skill level you will have to look up things and practice, but there is another issue too: careless mistakes. So you should definitely review your chapters after writing them, so you can spot the typos and errors like that yourself before posting! Since you said you'll try and edit these chapters, best of luck with that.
*spits on the ugly drawings*
Instead of saying "apparently blood", try describing a foul odor in the air, which convinced MC (and readers) that it was blood.
There are many errors throughout the chapter, some of which might be because of author's skill level, but others are just typos and mistakes. Would recommend reviewing the chapter after writing it to spot such errors before posting. Or coming back, reviewing an older chapter and fixing it.
Please tell how to "chill up"
What do you mean "though they are no really immortal"?
his. husband. her
this is cursed paragraph. Please capitalize words and do not use random brackets
not fought. it's fight
don't capitalized unnecessary words