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so I finished it but on pc so the chapter synching is wonky on the site. there's a lot of stuff that gets lost in translation, I had to look up separately. didn't start reading till the anime came out, so no comment on that. CHaracters felt 2 dimensional at best with far too much repetition of fluff. the world design was prolly the best part and it still kinda sucked ass, overall an overrated story, that felt rushed especially near the end.
yuuto just wants to play grandpa and spoil all the kids, also he seems like he wants to hang out with another dragon.
For starters, I am thoroughly enjoying the story, thank you! next on the stars" your writing could be better, though that may be because of a language barrier, it can be breaking to the suspension of disbelief, the stability of updates I gave 5 stars because I just got caught up to the end of where you are currently. Story development is good, not great but we are on webnovel, not trying to publish to an editor for print, hell I don't even give jks manga or solo leveling 5 and they are both at anime stage with their stories, it's not you but the level of professionalism will never be there, the story is made to be ongoing for too long, which is a great thing. I like your characters, some don't feel as fleshed out as they could be, but we just met a lot of them and others only get so much print space, I would also get a notebook and keep the character files in that or quick reference, you mess them up alot in the last few chapters moreso specifically sage and jade. the world isn't super well built but we are still in a forty mile radius so a lot of room for improvement. Thank you again for a good story.
nice the weeping angels.
you'd think rend would be useful here.
nope. I'd be a trainer to the main character or the hobo on the side of the road mumbling things that just seem to be nonsense, but its the future actually.
Good Chapter, not too happy with the cliffhanger again, but It's you so I don't expect much else. Getting nowhere fast is your thing eventually it will cost you readers, though.
I can't complain too much with your writing quality as I've been here for MDS and MVS so it just bothers me a little with grammar typos and translation into my native WI US English. I'm also starting past CH 300 so stability of updates is unknown as of yet. Story development, I give a 3 almost 4 as stated previously I have read the authors other 2 books almost to completion and I'm used to his awkward pacing and irregular use of cliffhangers, meaning far too often. Character design; I would like to see more depth to the characters, but sometimes it just takes a while especially for the core characters also i understand that there are backstory, present time and future growth so it may be difficult to weave the three aspects together. World background is the author best skill, but at times this feels inconsistent, but I do like it keep up the good work. I have two points of outsider input one author to another. first can we get some more wolves in the pack, and two can we get some weird wolf variations, colors of fur abilities, weaknesses resistances, a wolf not allergic to chocolate. thanks and also a shoutout to devils advocate you do wonders.
He's getting better, but there is an art to cliffhangers.
So far I'm liking it, still not too fond of your pacing. 'My dragon system' was my favorite so far, keep up the good work, also can we get a few more wolves in the pack