KingLettuce

As far as Warhammer 40k fanfics go this one feels like the most accurate representation of space marines that I’ve read. The story is progressing nicely so far and in a direction that makes sense. The grammar is good and the chapters are a nice length. Definitely a solid 4.8 out of 5 stars. Keep up the good work Author!!!!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

What you could do to help develop a character is think of a character as a friend. You can try to imagine the different ways this friend might respond to questions or problems and then try to come up with a response based off of that. You can also do one offs or short stories with a character to use as a reference when your writing for this story. This all takes more time out of your day but I think it will help with the overall writing process 👍

The premise of the story is interesting and there aren’t issues with the grammar or spelling. But the one thing that hits you the more you read is the author writing the same thing over and over again. A couple of chapters felt like they were the same thing worded slightly different, and the same words are used as descriptions by multiple characters like “wild card” or the mc saying he doesn’t care let them come or something along those lines. It gets repetitive and is not nice to read because instead of feeling like a pov from multiple characters, it feels like the same person saying the same thing. Some of the characters feel like the same character because they use the same words even though they are supposed to be different. If this is improved the story can be pretty good, keep up the good work Author!!!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

The mf is overpowered from the beginning but I don’t really mind that. As far as the plot goes it kind of follows the show with variations, but either way I haven’t seen many 100 fanfics so I ain’t mad about that. If you don’t mind either of those two things the story itself has decently long chapters and good grammar. Keep up the good work Author!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

Although the grammar is a little off in some parts here or there, overall it is pretty easy to understand and enjoy the story. As far as the story goes, I like how it combines things from different shows/media. But the one thing I was a little unsure of is how the mc’s power works. But other than that the translation is good and I definitely recommend to give this one a read. ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

Surprisingly funny, the chapters are good length and the grammar is good as well. Some sections of the story are copies of the show, but somehow it doesn’t feel as bad as it does in other stories I have read. I can only hope that the story keeps its quality in the future. Keep up the good work Author!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

The story which is about house of the dragons, is decent with not too many issues. The way the pov jumps from chapter to chapter or all in the same chapter can be a little confusing but you can still get the point. The grammar is mostly good with some little issues here or there but you can still understand what was meant to be said. Chapter length is a little short for my tastes but with how often the story is updated it doesn’t really matter much. Overall the story is pretty decent and the progression is paced pretty good. Keep up the good work Author!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

Very interesting concept and I already like the first 3 chapters, no issues with either grammar or chapter length. Overall very enjoyable to read, hopefully it stays this quality in the future. Keep up the good work Author!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

Surprisingly entertaining, it is a classic fantasy story that has good chapter length and good grammar. Nothing much at all to complain about, can’t wait to read more 👍 ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

A little slow plot wise for my taste but overall very enjoyable and easy to binge read. Keep up the good work Author!!!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………