SinnedToHeaven

maybe put some commas as it helps in flow and readability

it's better to just gloss over or better yet, leave the info dump of the original out of ur ff. I bet a liver that the overwhelming amount of people like me just scrolled fast through it.

my point still stands. Even not sound mentally, there's a right way of "venting". He was acting like any traumatized child would if they had power and authority to act upon their entitlement and insecurities. I was not criticizing, I was just pointing it out to make sure author knew what they were doing. I am a zealous advocate of character development after all. But since u pointed it out "mentally unsound", mental instability or insane person would act completely differently.

tffc

if your purpose was to make him look like a teenager who can't control his childish emotion and without critical thinking, self awareness, then u succeeded

no its okay everyone have every right to critique anyone and say freely what u want

so u mean he got angry because someone didn't suffer equally?

nah it's very op idk what u talking ab

u also just made a normal human with the exception of super regeneration just make his heart stop with his own hand without him going to analyptic shock or his body completely shutting down in response. Also if he somehow reallistically stops his heart without puncturing his lungs, ergos, organ failure, his brain will immediately fall into unconscious state which will cause him to fail stopping his heart. Since you decided to mention all of SS fanfics, I have the right to rant. Yours is also very unrealistic. Furthermore, achieving the assessment, legendary feels also undeserved since it all happened in one chapter. More furthermore, his only achievement that you decided to attribute to his legendary assesment that no one in history was able to achieve, was "stopping" his heart and surviving. Appearantly, the world u constructed, like the gladiators and monsters and stuff, was useless to the plot.