Stephen_Ruchert

I can't read the text message style writing. jason: how are you today john: I'm doing good that's not writing you lose emersion in the story I think you have a great idea and story here but this just takes away from everything

Stolen from fanfiction thank you guys for pointing out......

whiplash is the word of the day with all the jumping around and this story goes it's like he doesn't even finish or no conclusion for each world be fore suddenly jumping to another. his perks sometimes seem to transfere over other times not. good writing quality but hard to get attached to anything if mc doesn't spend time with other characters and just basicly goes from one to story to another taking what he wants then leaving

dude is like 4 years old I know it's fantasy but really making little kids out to be bad ass is kinda over the top I bet if I keep reading the 4 year old will beat the shit out of adults and go on to become the phionex emperor and have like 50 concubines lol

he knows what he did lol

so this guy knows the future pretty sure they have no classification yet

harem is not bad if written well and believable honestly this author is a great writer so I'm gonna let them cook lol if nick needs more women then go for it honestly I bet you everyone complaining would not drop if written well

what? fernando?

make a spell that summons the stones

but they are fixed the others aren't. families timed their dives to hit these respawns if they know when it was last defeated it has an amount of time before respawn.