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Ray_Dark

Ray_Dark

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2019-12-02 JointIndia
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  • Ray_Dark
    Ray_Dark4 years ago
    Posté

    nice and thrilling roman with horror, it's thrilling to at author have good potential, I think she can do a far better job just keep up the good work.

  • Ray_Dark
    Ray_Dark4 years ago
    Commenté

    it's a good story the horror and thrilled in the first paragraph, jut little grammar mistakes like in the first line "I hated the color red because it was a color that hunters my dreams" this is going in the past tense like she hates red color in the past, not in the present, it should be more like this. "I hate red because it's a color that hunters my dreams" and the other line should be like this "then my eyes drifters around I found my best friend Tara's body nailed on the wall or rather what left of her"

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  • Ray_Dark
    Ray_Dark4 years ago
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    Intrusting, Guy name Leo reincarnate in another world with wings after his death, good story people should read it, not the best but it's good, Author is immature but has potential in time I think he can grow and write even better.