Dragon_Nexus
Lv2
I slack off at work writing about the stories I go to sleep imagining at night... English is not my native tongue.
2019-11-30 JointRomania
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Dragon_Nexus3yrRépondu à Harem_fanCh 10 Chapter 7: The father of my brother- Dragon_Nexus3yrCommenté
This is good, but could use some polish. Some pros: - Sentence structure is excellent - Premise is not forced - MC is very relatable Some cons: - His parents seem kind of scatter brained, especially his dad. Supporting characters should be just as relatable as the MCs.
Ch 1 1. Rebirth - Dragon_Nexus3yrCommenté
The name's Tonic, Jin Tonic.
"My son Jin, you just fell down the stairs and hit your head really hard. You were unconscious for a full hour now. I am glad you finally woke up."