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The mushrooms become a talking point in later chapters (around chapter 32 in my backlog) and rest assured it'll be explained by then, but yeah, it does sound like a plot hole early on haha.
It feels like a wonderful poem written in a novel-like fashion. It tugs at your heartstrings with its characters, and really encapsulates the feelings the author is trying to convey.
Everything's happening so fast HELP
One of the best I've read in the site- and it fits my tastes too! I can picture the scenes vividly as if I was looking into an image, and the prose capture me into the story like a book really should. The pacing is wonderful, with a balance mix of descriptions, narrations, and dialogue. Overall it was a very good read. Keep at it!
It's a very good fiction. It stands out from the rest the website has to offer. The prose and style are very similar to that of a published book, which is good. The only thing keeping the story from its full potential would be the balance in showing vs telling a scene. The first two chapters are victims of this. Overall though, very great job! Keep at it!