supreme_primordial

great read[img=recommend] {hhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh}

Has potential to be great but that depends on how the aithor plans his plot 🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🥜🍄🥑🥔🥑🥜🍑🥑🥑🥔🍓🍌🍆🍆🍆🍆🍆🥔🥔🥔🥔🥔🥔🍓🍓🍓🍒🍒🥔🥕🥕🥜🍆🍏🍎🏺🥤🥤🥃🥂🥂🥂🥤🥢🍹🥤🏺🏺🏺🥂

hope its female that be dope...whats their power

present

except for the in consistency in updates this book is well written the characterdesign are splendid and the world background is good enough to keep the book interesting...also the author should explain his cultivation system in more details cause its still confussing

try writing other genres just to open up new ideas

Hope he doesnt join the blades

paragraph your work

gonna give myself five stars cause why not but you reading this can rate how ever you want this is just a way for me to improve my writing skills so the more strict you rate me the more learn

the way your storyline flows is the same 1.dead parents 2.unrealistic powers thay your character has not saying that its bad to load up your mc with op powers and if i guess right you want depth to your character but how will he progress when he is given everything just saying you should paint your own picture dont trace the same script that every author follows (check out keviascending and devil paragon;s book you will get what i mean)