SrLao
Es en la lectura de las historias, buenas o malas, donde encuentro el placer de seguir viviendo. Equipo NoHarem
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No se si incomodo, pero siento que por como lo mostrás por dentro y supuestamente lo ven los demas por fuera no coincide. O capas soy yo que no conecta con el protagonista y lo termino viendo como algo negativo para el rol que ocupa en la trama. En lo personal preferiría menos auto-refleccion/desprecio del personaje y seguir con el foco de la historia principal. Pero esto último son gustos personales y no un argumento
i'm glad you came back. but i feel the chapter was not good. i got the impression that you wasted a development with “the sisters”. for example, i remember that the first “immortal child” (a baby was turned into a vampire by the oldest member of the sisters). and second impression, is that the time jump was misused. skipping the interactions and connections with four clans in Europe. Lastly that the protagonist, “forgot” slavery. ignoring all of the above, I'm glad you didn't give up on fanfic, it's the best made about the twilight saga universe. Translated with DeepL.com (free version)
I can't stand this, I just don't like the way the characters are and their interactions. They seem to me to be very forced and unnatural actions for the context surrounding the time and place. Writing Quality (3★), Stability of Updates (4★), Story Development (2★), Character Design (2★), World Background (3★).
Writing Quality (4★), Updating Stability (3★), Story Development (2★), Character Design (2★), world background (4★). I got to read up to chapter 20, it's entertaining but the MC, is an emo, the characters seem like flat cliches. There are moments when the narrative lets you see what a jerk the MC is but then it resorts to the secondary characters and how it tries to highlight in a forced way, "the greatness of the MC". I can't say the novel is bad but it's not very good either. It fulfills the function of entertaining. (Traductor)
If some secret and scientific group wanted to study or use MC, it would be interesting and logical if they were offered a paid contract, with weekly hours. Obviously due to the plot he can have a confrontation with a secret group for trying to retain or kidnap him only for Mc to tell him at the end "they could have paid me to study me" or "if you know what I am, and unlike the hulk, I have brain, we were able to reach a mutual agreement" (traductor)
It would be interesting that the mc left children on the way, and that their descendants (with some unique trait) form a millenary family and among them, some are immortal or have prolonged lives of 400 or 1000 years. Thus making a new supernatural species of white hair. All this to create new plots and expand the background of the world. Hopefully it won't be the typical Twilight fanfic cliche, where they arrive at Forck Village, fall in love with one of the Cullens and leave all the development of thousands of years behind. Translated with DeepL.com (free version)
It would be interesting that the mc left children on the way, and that their descendants (with some unique trait) form a millenary family and among them, some are immortal or have prolonged lives of 400 or 1000 years. Thus making a new supernatural species of white hair. All this to create new plots and expand the background of the world. Hopefully it won't be the typical Twilight fanfic cliche, where they arrive at Forck Village, fall in love with one of the Cullens and leave all the development of thousands of years behind. Translated with DeepL.com (free version)