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This man got his priorities straight!!!
The author main language is Chinese so grammar is absolutely crap, needs a proof reading desperately. Has a possibly good story it’s just under a ton of grammar errors. In addition as far at the Rewrite I don’t think it’s happening as the last update was two years ago by the looks of it. Writer also falls into the hole of most Chinese fanfic writers by introducing cultivation elements into the story like the spacial ring witch should be called storage ring, sementics I know but in the world of Naruto’s that’s what it would be called. Outside of that it needs filler pieces to flesh out the story like small scenes with the aunt and training scenes for the MC to show effort and growth, introducing a few road block for his abilities would also help. Plus the most obvious is the crap system, just drop the system and have him accidentally figure out his bloodline ability by suddenly changing the color of his hand to red or blue, a system isn’t needed to make a good story, his bloodline ability is enough to give him an edge he can manipulate his body in extreme ways, plus cut the DNA assimilation as it hack and too repetitive, everyone wants the sharingan everyone wants the uzumaki bloodline why can’t anyone stand on their own bloodline and get good, example is Hashirama had one bloodline and took on all the nine tailed beast by himself, you don’t need a lot of bloodline or doujustu or tailed beast to be powerful you just got to put in the work. Also don’t make the Harem thing so obvious, have it remain rare and when his bloodline eventually comes out cause that crap is tough to hide, one doctor visit and it’s found out, he can fall under the trope of clan restoration or creation act that a lot of Naruto fanfic writers use which actually makes sense and explains away the harem trope as more necessary for the plot and the Harem mebmbers as more import. Lastly you have to include the MC failing, he can’t always succeed, fighting Shisui and landing a hit is absurd at that age, I know Naruto has that trope of Kakashi and Itachi being powerful at that age but they also had either a clan or powerful parent to give them necessary training in their early life that explains their skill, as a civilian born kid even with an OP bloodline he doesn’t have the ‘knowledge’ to stack up to them, his constant chakra current or CCC is mildly impressive idea but I don’t see it putting him on their level that early. Hope the writer does a rewrite eventually and the grammer is fixed.
probably a traitor or captured ninja gave it away and while a cool jutsu most can't make it combat viable and wouldn't see the memory benefit do to not using it for long enough over a more durable clone with higher combat ability.
some point their just had to be a group of heroes spinning a wheel to guess at the next cosmic or cataclysmic event and betting on who or which group had to deal with it. Tony Stark : I'm betting 2k on Scarlet Witch and the X - men once again altering Reality and its up to Squirrel Girl to save the day.
As of chapter 7 so far not a bad story, hope the author keeps updating. Wish there was less chapter breaks as the story can get long winded and spill from chapter to chapter but that's the only real problem so far and easily ignorable.
So is this an ongoing problem he had from his previous life???
The story is there but I think the author is trying to get to major plot points too fast and is missing filler pieces to expalin certain actions or decisions or the absent background info that would make us like a character, some things are just blatantly looked over by characters that should be more aware obvious actions that most people would be wary of, and while I enjoy harems the heroines are just falling for a guy with no actual basis, I get the girlfriend and childhood friend but the pro hero speedster maybe should of started as just a fan that slowly became infatuated not in love after a short stream. On the plus side though the story has great bones and with some more fleshing out could be awesome, the system need more moments where Scott actually studies it and figures out how his ‘super power’ works (can’t tell me he’s just accepting a random power system in a society that is stated to have interdemsional warlords and aliens) I expect him to be more aware of the system that is suddenly predicting crimes and has the word ’harem’ in its name, possible mind control and what not are on the table in superpowered worlds. The heroines have some decent backstory building but Maya’s choices are just all over the place, and Emma is just unexplainable as I refuse to believe a flash level speedsters is going to be unable to clean sweep a whole city in seconds to look for someone as she stated herself to be ‘faster then light’ that level of speed is absurd and overpowered that I find it hard for her to not find Scott in seconds of seeing the stream, she herself stated she knew where his first stream was as it was in her ‘patrol’ area so she must have an idea of major and minor parts of the city or can easyily look up a street sign or building and shop names. The stream it’s self just need more detail, does it blur identify features like a location or features to keep Scott’s secret, does it give out minor missions, what all does it sell and when does Scott buy his stuff, the watch he used comes out of left field or was just too small a part to even notice yet it’s a major tool he uses when he saves Elena. What does the system do and what are its defined rules. Scott himself just seems kind of all over the place, bro is supposedly intelligent yet I have yet see him do anything remotely smart as he just seems to go with the flow and whim of the system and not ask any questions and as a vigilante is doing zero prep work or investigation work into criminals or ‘black mechanica’ an organization that supposedly has alien tech and nuclear capabilities and has been running around heroes for years and you expect me to believe his one foray into them is causing them a lick of trouble, it’s stated they are a global organization, one guy in one city stumbling on a cell isn’t going to do anything but annoy them, and get a small bounty of ’Nightwatch’, they’ve had to have dealt with things like him before just from how many superabled people there are now, plus his back story is just missing, why is his mom import or even where are his parents, is there some family situation we should be aware of. Vincent is just not fleshed out and too stereotyped, I believe him a bad guy but I think he’s also being too obvious with it, more subtle gaslighting and less outright bastard and his character improves dramatically as he pushes a wedge between maya and Scott instead of one asshole phone call. Mostly the story just needs filler to help flesh out the world and characters, little Paragraphs to explain actions or choices that build a character and help the reader understand character motivations. Maybe a side piece chapters for none important characters to help flesh out the sudden hero streams effect on the wider population or maybe a few small time heroes using it to fund their own hero activities, maybe a few people who think like Scott following in his footsteps, maybe Emma doing her own stream disguised as a different vigilante like a dark speedster named Shade. In summary I like the story just wished it was more fleshed out as I keep running into the problem of doubling back and questioning when did this happen, ‘offscreen’ moments that confuse readers and just a lack of scenes that transition the story, I hope the writer continues to write and I’m going to continue reading the story and hope it’s fleshed our more later in the story.
Alexander be wanting the hands, I truly believe he might pull off a win.
So from Ohio now in living on the Alabama and Florida Border?
this sentence makes no sense period, I understand your setting up a joke but tentacles is a word everyone knows, is this a translation error or an actually a different word.