Stolen fic, “caught in the web of the spider” if i am not mistaken.

Hey, interesting story, god to know you wont be abandoning it, for the rewrite i would suggest keeping the timeline clearer since some parts i was in doubt if it was a flashback or not, perhaps showing a litte more interactions between MC and his parents such as their reactions to his actions (as in show not tell), i would not necessarily say to focus on daily life such as school and other activites but at least to give us the readers an idea of what is happening, if you wish to focus on his encounter with peter perhaps make Missouri his hometown as well or that the parents wished to move already and were in doubt between a couple of states and his opinion tips the scale. As for powers i enjoyed his scientific side and the energy manipulation though cool perhaps made his science a little irrelevant, good luck on the new story

I noticed that in the last 3 chapters you started refering to the MC past lives as if he remembered them, you should probably edit them to be like a feeling or instinct

Missing tag: System.

Liked the beginning, though the fact that the MC apears to take luffys crew spoiled for me, good luck with the story

Not a fan of the owl to be honest, by his personality the wolves should be it, any more reeks of magic

And personally i never liked storys where Muggleborns go around calling everything archaic, i mean, should wizards go around calling muggles cavemen since they cant teleport around and such? Specially when you consider technology doesn’t work around magic

Nice story, the pace is somewhat fast but if the focus are the later years or after Hogwarts it makes sense, the speed in wich he learns “advanced” magic is weird by this pace he will learn everything there is to learn by the second/third year wich doesn’t sound possible, but the apparent focus guns will have in this story are kind of a dealbreaker, I understand if he has to use them on the muggle world but on the magic one i just can’t stand it it shouldn’t be a hp fanfic than but something else

Liked the premisse but Vampires having magic doesn’t makes sense, immortal beings with acess to magic would never be hunted by wizards, most likely the opposite would happen, all wizards wanting to live forever would simply become vampires since they dont lose their magic

“Sirius’ savior” by silverfawkes I believe

Several crossovers end up spoiling the story for me, shame, seemed interesting

And it was going to Harem, not sure if this writer will change that or not if he continues writing beyond where it stopped

Not really completed but it goes to chp 30 which should be equivalent to 200 chapters in this story more or less (the chapters are longer)

For those interested in reading ahead the original goes by the name “Harry Potter and the gift of memories” by “The Engulfing Silence” 2012-2013 apparently completed

Stolen fic, original being Delenda Est by Lord Silvere (completed)

I will soon delete the review not to influence the story score

Nice chapter, just dont know why you didn’t make leman either the firstborn or second

A dual wielding Lord Stark should have been enough warning for me but I still tried to read it (They have a greatsword Ice it doesn’t make sense not to use it), but in the second chapter we discover it is an AU story, more than the premise tells us (If i had to guess it was done so the Writer can romance MC to the incest family). Writer put correct labels on it

A great sword, not possible to dual wield it with another

Liked the story until MC ate the devil fruit, why most fanfics insist on the mc eating a devil fruit and a weird one at that i will never understand