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2018-12-13 JointGlobal
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  • Supsup
    Supsup4mth
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    "Ever since before" ? Before need to be removed no ?

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    I've been reborn as a villain in an erotic game
    Fantaisie · Roni_Sarker
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  • Supsup
    Supsup6mth
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    Hello, there is a few problem that came from the lack of writing experience.First make sure to separate two different persons who talk also better use "" Ex:Jack (hello) natsumi (hello)ToJack : "Hello"Natsumi : "Hello"Also use gramarly or chatgpt or anything to check the text. Good luck with the following story.

    My Alsome Life in a Hentai World I'll cuckold You.
    Fantaisie · Dracoking
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  • Supsup
    Supsup6mth
    Répondu à Alpha_astro

    Yeah the few first chapter was similar and came to check if other knew it well I hope author can respond to that ?I don't care if the beginning is a copy but the "man of the House" had a big flaw the author liked way too much drama and all is book were drama on drama.

    Master of the Manor
    Fantaisie · Avi_Lekhak
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  • Supsup
    Supsup8mth
    Répondu à AspiringPedo

    Nope he talking about the settings but he wouldn't have been able to help her then

    'I should've understood, my luck will never be good,' Adam cursed that he had to use the pardon on Robin, if he wasn't being a horndog at the start and had thought his choices through he would've been able to use the pardon on Tsunade and not destroy the innocent love story she had going on with Dan Kato.
    Unheard Wishes: A Tale of Desires
    Anime et bandes dessinées · Over_The_Moon69
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  • Supsup
    Supsup1yr
    Répondu à Supsup

    I want to be clearer on the quality, it's way more readable than most mtl and as I said there is only one recurring miss. It's almost spotless. Truly a good job .

    I Became The Rich Second Generation Villain
    Urbain · Daddy_strikes_
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  • Supsup
    Supsup1yr
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    The story is good. Nothing new to the genre but well executed. The trad is uneven, In fact it's MTL and that work 95% Of the time and it's pleasing to read. The only problem is with "gun" translate by "wooden something". A bit disappointing because it's almost the only problem. Keep in mind that it's free. Thanks for the trad I passed a good time.

    I Became The Rich Second Generation Villain
    Urbain · Daddy_strikes_
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  • Supsup
    Supsup1yr
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    First time I review without reading any chapter. The synopsis is quite funny and the last phrase caught me so I don't care get your star.

    The Strongest Harem Lord
    Fantaisie · SinglePain
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  • Supsup
    Supsup1yr
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    Overall a really good fanfic ,well written a bit cringe /silly but not unbearable, that even add a good mood while reading. I think you should not hesitate to expand the harem (not disproportionate and not pokeharem). But with the pace of the story there is no problem. Please don't set yourself a limit especially if there will be another universe after it. (yeah I have a preference for big harem:) everything is in the pace also I love the pov chapter. The only default is the gap in the last updates. A bit scared that it will slowly be longer and longer. Thanks to the author, just don't forget that there will always be people who trash talk /dislike your choice but ultimately it's your stories. Good luck with the following.

    This isn't High School DxD, damn it!
    Anime et bandes dessinées · The_POZ
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  • Supsup
    Supsup1yr
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    Hello I only read 5 chapter right now but I will continue. Everything seems fine for now. The only thing bugging me is the lack of difference between the talk and the thought of the characters. If it could be changed in the future chap that would had quality to the writing. It's sometimes hard to know if the Mc talk or not. But everything else is good so it's just a little detail.

    Before I Died, I Kissed Rias Gremory
    Anime et bandes dessinées · SoftCrow
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  • Supsup
    Supsup1yr
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    Yourself should be myself

    "Don't worry, I know its your job but just relax. I can protect yourself". And like that my breakfast went on with me trying to convince them and they not accepting till in the end they finally gave up.
    In A Reverse World As The Childhood Friend
    Fantaisie · Big_Fan_Of_Daoism
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  • Supsup
    Supsup1yr
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    There he seems to just take 10% less dommage. To 90 - > by 90 /or/ to 10 If what is intended was to be almost immune to fire.

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    Surviving in Woman's world as a novel villain.
    Urbain · ForManaga
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  • Supsup
    Supsup1yr
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    It's good to have a new chapter thanks

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  • Supsup
    Supsup1yr
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    The story is good seems interesting but there is an obvious need of editing. I suppose that is a translation work due to the high number of problem for he/she man/woman. If there weren't those errors the story would be understandable even with the other errors. But it's impossible to understand I don't know if the boss is a woman or a guy, I even begin to have doubt on the s class hunter well almost sure it is a woman. In all cases thanks for the work I hope it get better due to the interesting story.

    I became a rental boyfriend in the reverse world
    Anime et bandes dessinées · NovelTranslations
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  • Supsup
    Supsup1yr
    Répondu à Shaywalloppp

    Hello I have this story seated in my library for a while but i hesitate to read this : Could you please give me some answers 1) is the story light hearted if not how? 2) is there ntr 3) about the harem how big and mainly is it a true harem where female protagonist love /have feelings for the Mc and are exclusive so no Yuri /no open relationship. Thanks for the answers.

    In the hentai world, I tried a second life(Stopped update and Rewrite)
    Anime et bandes dessinées · Shaywalloppp
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  • Supsup
    Supsup1yr
    Répondu à Supsup

    Slowly *:Sorry don't know why my last word passed in full uppercase

    Ch 1 Chapter 1: Rebirth
    Escape To Her World
    Fantaisie · yourdreamsprince
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  • Supsup
    Supsup1yr
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    Thanks for the chapter and seems okay. Just if you could make the talk more smooth: J said : / L said : /Jsaid: ... It's a bit mechanical and weird. Every thing is nice so you can just try it SLOWLY.

    Ch 1 Chapter 1: Rebirth
    Escape To Her World
    Fantaisie · yourdreamsprince
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  • Supsup
    Supsup1yr
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    Thanks interesting but seems to have problem with he/she man/woman.

    Ch 2 I Have Been A Hired Boyfriend In The Reverse World. Episode 2
    I became a rental boyfriend in the reverse world
    Anime et bandes dessinées · NovelTranslations
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  • Supsup
    Supsup1yr
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    Seems interesting but is it dropped ? _

    All The Heroines Are Single
    Fantaisie · Kane_The_Judge
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  • Supsup
    Supsup1yr
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    Well almost a 4 star for me. The story seems interesting and I want to know more about it. There is one "major" problem there is many writing error (grammar) Thanks for the work I will continue to read it.

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  • Supsup
    Supsup1yr
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    Thanks for the chapter, I posted a review where I ask a question about the future of the story, I would like if you could answer my questions /doubts.

    Ch 70 Nora Gets Comfortable
    Superheroine-Seducing Accountant
    Urbain · chastityqm
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