God I’m to old for the wipper snappers. Glaze? I had to google that… it sounds dirty in ways I don’t associate with another male. I’ll be judgy,(people whom say they won’t judge are liars. You do you… in private. In public… let’s just say everyone has fetishs. Find a better one like cosplaying or… (safe for chat?..) bikinis. (Nailed it, safe for everyone those 2.) just keep your “glaze” to people whom can appreciate it. I’m sure there’s someone… just keep looking!

I’m surprised the suits of armor haven’t been mobilized. It might tip more of their hand that he has control of the castle to people not in the know but… A KNIGHT IS SWORN TO VALORE! Honour, Honesty, Valour and Loyalty. Knights of the lady hogwarts are ready willing able annnnnnd stuck with a sticking charm. Gods help people disabling the few things that are protecting their lives… for convenience. I CANNOT MOVE!.

This is why we have tear gas and rock salt shotgun shells. A person can be smart. A mobs IQ is dropped by the number of people gathered, the amount of Karen's and the number of people with Skittles colors hair.(You know who you are.) Attacking a ninjas home can't be legal. A touch of killer intent calls the peepers away. Best father son bonding event, pranking EVERYONE involved without getting caught. (Extra credit for getting the hokage and Donzo to blame each other and screwing their reps is a plus.)

I'm personally blaming the fat cat torcherer. One, she torcherer that cat. 2 baby sitting that cow everyday would drive everyone to drink. 3 I'm not gonna lie I am a dog person. However, when a cat is tormented so bad it develops skill that beats up gennin often. (Remember a child with chakra can easily beat a fully grown adult with pure physical power. Sakura and Naruto had no real martial art skill. Naruto just hits in in the face hard and often. (His shadow clone combos might as well be wwe wrestling moves.))

One, we get there when we get there. The comments are more for feedback and less about a debate. Two this story is enjoyable, I am pointing out a plot hole CALM DOWN hunny bunny. Calling the author trash is in poor taste. If you don't like the book leave. Finally this is free. Mr author is not on our time table. You want personal attention jump on a patron thing.(Assuming author has one.)

Do they not know that all the alphas in Naruto get Donzo’d? That or emotionally crippled… guess that’s also Donzo’d… How does one not get screwed by root while being strong. (Hokage didn’t protect the white fang one of the few Kages they had. He also let the senjus, uzumakis and Uchina be turned on and die off IN CANNON. Why would he save one who showed off to be a future threat?)

I like the depth of the characters and the mc not being a simple tool. A couple words at the right time can shake worlds… A second title could be, A Nara who’s not lazy! For those who don’t like those that crush cannon and Mc’s that don’t have Goku and Naruto IQ levels of derp, this is not the book for you. Mc is clever, strong (not god) and like to stir up trouble. Hokage and his root are not good people. (Some people say the same about cannon but not all.) minor to mid lvl wish fulfillment.

Wars is breaking out, and the elite guard is going to just drink… without testing for the poisons that they have to check every day… and ALL the guards are going to drink at once… Welp at least they’re dead for this epic level of pure stupidity. I’ma chalk this up to being around stupid nobility has completely ruined them to a point of not being even chunin. And lazy writing.

What worse then not helping is standing around gawking. If they cleared the area and set up barriers or heros to stop debris that could fly far it be fine. Also it’s one thing to bring in the robbers an thieves villains. A group that’s after the children whom are your future protectors not to ransom but to kill are terrorists. They don’t get mercy for the have left the world of people. They aren’t even villains anymore. Ones the kids start to die the heros will no longer have gloves either and true war would break out. So like endever does kill it with fire and prejudice.

Metal generates electricity with a bit of magnetism you can pump out a metaphorical f’k ton. Rail guns also use magnets to function with tons of electricity. With pure mc power you have a male livening railgun. That with have to start paying fines for destroying currency YOU VILLAIN!

Reo could just form a metal box around himself an block the vision. Or puppeteer his suit and sneak up on him that way.

Making metal brittle sure cause rapid temp change causes fractures… unless you control the metal on a molecular level… the heat thing sure I guess if the mc let you target him long enough without a hunk of metal being fired at you. I’d go with non metallic poisons. Unless he can tell it’s coming it could knock him out the same as anything. Sonics would work once. The shadow quirk might be able to penetrate with some stealth.

If your gunna do a dragon ba(cough), proper outro you have to have the cliffhanger questions! (Insert announcer voice here.) Will Deku prove to be a Deku? Will a foot massage save a relationship?! Find out on the next episode of Levianthan balls Mo!

Also when Alucard turns into his female self GET THAT BEOCH A CANON!

So you wouldn’t be offended if it was cooked human meat?..

See, like I said, “evil laugh” presentation!

If your going to drop a new novel like that… you got to do so with style and all villains know evil, but super villains know… Presentation!!! (Insert heavy mental!) And after stealing all those stones, we all know ya ain’t a goody to shoe farm boy from Kansas.

How MANY POOOOINTS!.. The answer is simple. MOOR!

I dub his knights the order of the fried chicken, his Shadows shalt be naked the order of the cold turkey! So mote it be!

Yo, he did that to me too! He also made me chuckle! Get the chuckles brigade to get him. Set him in a cell listing to the dadest dad jokes to ever dad until he becomes… (bum bum buuuuuum) (insert punchline here!)